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Deborah Junior Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 41 |
When all my secrets are whispered All the lies exposed and clear When everyone has seen my tears And knows the thoughts which I hold dear When trust has reached its outer limit And the last word has been spoken Then I know in my fragile mind That my hear has coldly been broken When friends become enemies And people see my frown When I stand all alone My face turned down When sadness is my constant companion And smiles are few and rare Then I know my hear is broken And you no longer care When I fight with myself Knowing not why When I struggle to see To understand your good bye When I cry myself to sleep And think all things are bad I realize that my heart is broken And your love has made me sad When everything is over And nothing remains When I realize the truth You were just playing games When I look at myself And see loves lost touch I know that my heart is broken And that I miss you so much |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Welcome to Passions, Deborah! Wonderful poem! Sad but wonderful! Denise |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
God woman, you bring back some very painful memories for me. This poem is vey well developed- to say the least. I can only hope that you've learned from this experience, and it's made you a stronger person despite the hurting. Believe me when I say that things will get better!! And welcome to passions- where your pain- for the most part- is shared throughout us all! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
Geeeees I can't even say anything about this it is brilliant.....Thank you.........Bojopy |
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Deborah Junior Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 41 |
Thank you for posting your comments about my poetry. I've almost never shared my poetry with others and it is encouraging to know people like what I write. Deborah |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Great poem Deborah! I can relate to it, as can many others I am sure. I especially like the last stanza. |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Wonderful poem Deborah, Thanks for sharing  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Deborah, A contradiction but the fair sex is like that. Beautiful poem, well done, enjoyed the read. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Welcome to passions |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Very nice poem Deborah. Welcome to passions |
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hawk New Member
since 2000-01-04
Posts 3 |
i feel your pain, very nice poem |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Very beautiful poem. I've also been there. Thank you. "Love is always open arms, when you close your arms about love, you'll find you are left holding only yourself." from Leo Buscaglia-Love. |
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John Foulstone Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 100Australia |
Another welcome, Deborah. Ah, the great constant of the human condition - the ups and downs of falling in and out of love. Where would poets be without it? Enjoy the ride, 'cause you can't get off the rollercoaster, despite what Balladeer says. |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Very sad poem Debroah! Your emotions obviously displayed well on here. Welcome to Passions. Nathan |
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