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devina
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0 posted 01-03-2000 08:31 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for devina

Remember me as the dawn comes,
when your soul is aching anew,
when I no longer justify myself,
remember my love for you.

Although I'm the one letting go,
it's just as painful of a goodbye,
there now stands a starless heaven,
remember there are two that cry.

Memories of us are etched along-
my soul in firery grains,
I will always have a love for us,
please remember me just the same.


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
© Copyright 2000 Tanya Nicole Bustamante - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 01-03-2000 08:59 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Sad and beautiful, Devina. Full of emotion! I love it!      

 Denise

Bojopy
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2 posted 01-03-2000 09:03 PM       View Profile for Bojopy   Email Bojopy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bojopy

So true to heart upon a break up of any kind!!!!! Very sad........Bojopy


 

Meadowmuse
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3 posted 01-03-2000 09:04 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Letting go can be so painful. I like this, especially the line
"remember there are two that cry."

Dear LadyClaire
Eloise
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4 posted 01-03-2000 09:12 PM       View Profile for Eloise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Eloise

So sad, but very beautiful devina.  I really enjoyed this poem.  
Balladeer
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5 posted 01-03-2000 09:24 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Nicely written, devina, but if a woman lets me go, I'll do my best to forget her as soon as possible and, if I can't, she'll never know that.
Alwye
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In the space between moments


6 posted 01-03-2000 10:02 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Heartbreakingly beautiful.  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha


whiskey
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7 posted 01-03-2000 10:08 PM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

Sad but a beautiful poem  

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 01-03-2000 10:10 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Devina,
Balladeer, is right, why dwell on the past when the future can be so beautiful.
devina
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9 posted 01-03-2000 11:55 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Deer and Sy- I know you two are right when it comes to forgetting.  This was a poem I wrote right after my ex fiance and I broke up. I was trying so hard not to hate him. The newest feeling is very bitter I must say, as you will read in my next posting.  By this poem, I only tried to let everyone know that I haven't always felt such bitterness towards him after we broke up.  Thank you all for your comments!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Nate Dogg
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10 posted 01-04-2000 06:20 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Beautiful poem and well-written!

 Nathan
lucky
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11 posted 01-20-2000 02:40 AM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lucky

dearest,
I will always remember... How can I ne'er forget.

 
Local Rebel
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12 posted 01-20-2000 09:50 AM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Very nicely written devina -- and you have a soft mellow side too!  
Parker
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13 posted 01-21-2000 12:07 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

This is very sad and beautifull. Endings bring new beginnings.
I don't know if this is a good time to bring this up, but does this mean your single?  
d.schultz
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14 posted 01-21-2000 07:49 PM       View Profile for d.schultz   Email d.schultz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for d.schultz

I liked the poem... I can relate to the passage "I will always have a love for us"
vandana
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15 posted 01-21-2000 09:26 PM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

I enjoy your poem very much.
HelmutB
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16 posted 01-21-2000 09:53 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

It's never easy to let go
If it circles around love
Well written
Sad do.

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

lucky
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17 posted 01-22-2000 03:18 AM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lucky

you write so wanderifly that I just had to tel ya.

lucky

 
One Who Understands
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18 posted 01-22-2000 03:20 AM       View Profile for One Who Understands   Email One Who Understands   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for One Who Understands

Wonderful way to put such a sad reminising
Dark Angel
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19 posted 01-22-2000 03:23 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Very sad Devina,yet very beautiful!

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


hoot_owl_rn
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20 posted 01-22-2000 09:24 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

This is very beautiful Devina
Echo Rhayne
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21 posted 01-22-2000 01:49 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Tanya, this was a great read.  Excellent poem!

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~


devina
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22 posted 01-22-2000 07:25 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

I want to thank everyone, I had NO idea this would touch so many...so often heartache brings us all together thanks again!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
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