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Corinne
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0 posted 01-03-2000 08:22 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Corinne

Please forgive naivete and ignorance,
they seem to be lacking compass
for an exodus of time now passed,
vast in terms of vacillation.

Against fierce riptides, with religious conviction
swimming in dimensions of life, love, and sin,
we crashed in worry, signs of salvation
safeguarded in the mirroring clouds.

Spinning slowly, orbiting planets
smashed elongated echoes that veiled you.
Even silver vanishes in Venusís palms,
sea green silk you were in her eyes.

Even though we could not touch,
it was made more delicious by
the salty spray of someday.

(c) 2000 Corinne Bailey

© Copyright 2000 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 01-03-2000 08:30 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Oh, Corinne, I love this! So beautiful!

Great picture, too! I see that you zoomed it in a bit! (maybe someday I will be able to figure out my scanner and how it works!)


 Denise

Corinne
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2 posted 01-03-2000 08:59 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

thank you, Denise!  

Actually, someone must have zoomed it in for me!

Hilarious, huh?

Corinne
Denise
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3 posted 01-03-2000 09:00 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Well, that's service for ya, huh?! hehehe  

 Denise

hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 01-03-2000 11:20 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Beautiful poem  
Severn
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5 posted 01-04-2000 06:10 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Corinne, I think this is magical.
Well done.

 ...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara
whiskey
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6 posted 01-04-2000 09:38 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

Wonderful poem  
Corinne
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7 posted 01-04-2000 02:21 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Thank you, Hoot_Owl_m, Severn and Whiskey!

Corinne
Toerag
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Ala bam a


8 posted 01-04-2000 02:48 PM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Nicely done Ms. Corinne....keep up the talent you so obviously have...
Dreamer_556
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9 posted 01-04-2000 03:11 PM       View Profile for Dreamer_556   Email Dreamer_556   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dreamer_556

I am lost for words! (Which is unusual I must say!).
That is an outstanding piece of work.

~*Dreamer*~
LngJhnAg
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10 posted 01-04-2000 03:32 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Corinne - you are a very deep lady, and I mean that in the best of terms.  Your gift for free verse is unbelievable.
jaxjoy
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11 posted 01-04-2000 03:39 PM       View Profile for jaxjoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jaxjoy

Brilliant!!!!  I especially liked the third stanza.  This is breathtaking!  
Corinne
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12 posted 01-04-2000 09:29 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Wow!  You people know how to make a girl blush (and it ain't so pretty when an Irish woman blushes, red on top of red!).  

Thank you, Toerag, LngJhnAg and JaxJox - for such kind words!

Corinne
Sonny
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13 posted 01-05-2000 11:09 AM       View Profile for Sonny   Email Sonny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sonny

Corinne -

   Your poem is like a painting in progress with then ending like a promise to complete the masterpiece when 'someday' finally arrives.
   The image evoking lines are almost too much for me to fathom.  It transcends the creativity of my mind - making me wish for the gift to accurately imagine your cosmological imagery.  My heart, if not my mind, is completely in tune with your poem, though.  Excellent writing.

Sonny
Mike
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14 posted 01-06-2000 03:02 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Wonderful poem. I truly enjoyed your thoughts so elequantly expressed.
 
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