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A Flame

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Bojopy
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0 posted 01-03-2000 07:38 PM       View Profile for Bojopy   Email Bojopy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Bojopy



A flame, my flame, our flame
Has burned before, but nevermore
Our flame, a flame, my flame
will always just be yours
My flame, our flame, a flame
is all that I wish for


 

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Skyfyre
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1 posted 01-03-2000 07:41 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

I like the repeated lines ...

But -- this comes across as somewhat unfinished -- did you mean to do it that way?

Or perhaps just a spur-of-the-moment dance with the pen?

shrug.  

--Kess


 You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

Bojopy
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2 posted 01-03-2000 07:45 PM       View Profile for Bojopy   Email Bojopy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bojopy

Thank you... and yes I did want to add to it but my thoughts always seem to astray when I write and I like to finish stuff later but I think this one is better unfinished. To ^^^
patchoulipumpkin
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I really enjoyed it, but would agree with skyfyre that it does seem wanting for more.  I like the repetition, its works well.
Echo Rhayne
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4 posted 01-05-2000 10:56 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

I like how it keeps ya guessing, whether the flame will continue burning or wither and slowly fade away...   I like

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~
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