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The Perfect Moment

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Seaangel
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since 07-27-99
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Auckland, New Zealand


0 posted 01-03-2000 07:16 PM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seaangel

The perfect moment,
when worries fall

like lemon drops
on your tongue;

teasing,
exhilerating;

examining your toe
and discovering those antibiotics

are working;
standing stuffed on the street,

feet pounded sensitive from work,
and feeling the satisfaction;

thinking of your application to
the writing paper under review;

turning your insides
into delicious agonies.

Better than the communion
of just-lovers,

deeper than a meditation on
death,

and wider than your life
are these half-cravings

which play on your pores;
the natural symphony.
© Copyright 2000 Angela King - All Rights Reserved
Skyfyre
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since 08-15-99
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Sitting in Michael's Lap


1 posted 01-03-2000 07:19 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

"when worries fall
like lemon drops
on your tongue;"

Love those lines!  Well done!

--Kess



 You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

Seaangel
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2 posted 01-03-2000 08:49 PM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seaangel

thanx Kess..
hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
Posts 11105
Glen Hope, PA USA


3 posted 01-03-2000 11:16 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

"The perfect moment,
when worries fall
like lemon drops
on your tongue;"

Man...what an opening  

mirjam
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since 11-24-1999
Posts 248
Auckland, New Zealand


4 posted 01-04-2000 01:17 AM       View Profile for mirjam   Email mirjam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mirjam

always in awe of your work - man not only the first 4 lines - the whole lot!!!  "these half cravings which play on your pores."
Hey have you found out yet about the paper - when will you know??  You better tell me when you know!!  
samsonheart
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since 12-20-1999
Posts 72
Missouri rez.


5 posted 01-04-2000 01:44 AM       View Profile for samsonheart   Email samsonheart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for samsonheart

beautiful expressions, seaangel, I like this one.

samsonheart
Severn
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since 07-17-99
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6 posted 01-04-2000 02:45 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Angela - if you don't get into the paper I will sit down and cry with you my friend (then we'll go and contest it!!!)

Fantastic - again.

K

 ...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara
Dark Angel
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7 posted 01-04-2000 05:40 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

SeaAngel, Wow, I love this especially the first 4 lines.

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Echo Rhayne
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since 09-17-99
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Canyon Country, CA


8 posted 01-05-2000 11:19 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

WoW, fantastic job!!  lemon drops mmmmm, ooops sorry hehe  

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~
Seaangel
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9 posted 01-05-2000 04:08 PM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seaangel

It's great getting positive replies...
Kess, thanx again
Hoot, it came to me in a dream!! Nah, just kidding, I get flashes of lines I have to write down...does anyone else get that?
Mirjam, awe is mutual, and no I haven't, still waiting on the word, tenterhooks, etc!
samsonheart, thank you.
Severn, don't raise that possibility!!!!
DarkAngel, it came from the heart on the way home from work.
Echo Rhayne, yeah citrus is my favourite fruit...

 "Stop this day and night with me and you shall possess the origin of all poems,
You shall possess the good of the earth and sun (there are millions of suns left,)
You shall no longer take things at second or third hand, nor look through the eyes of the dead, nor feed on the spectres in books,
You shall not look through my eyes either, nor take things from me,
You shall listen to all sides and filter them from your self." >Walt Whitman, Song of Myself.
JennyLee
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since 09-01-99
Posts 1478
Northwestern, NJ.


10 posted 01-08-2000 08:28 AM       View Profile for JennyLee   Email JennyLee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JennyLee

Loved This Sea Angel  
Every line sublime  

Jenny Lee


 Words bloom like flowers that seem astonished at being born.

L. Pirandello
16th Century Dramatist

 
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