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Roller Coaster Farewell

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Balladeer
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0 posted 01-03-2000 06:40 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I'm tired of those tumultous rides
That shake and rattle my insides
And make my heart stick in my throat
Like pain without an antidote
Portraying love that can't be found.....
The roller coaster's closing down.

No more to sit upon that seat
And watch the world beneath my feet
Spin uncontrolled before my eyes
As I am held in rapt surprise
While being lifted off the ground.....
The roller coaster's closing down.

There was a time I loved the thrill
Of being carried up the hill,
A skyward trip toward Heaven's door
With promised happiness in store
But, each time that I neared the top,
There came an unexpected drop - - -

Which tore apart my very soul
As I spun down without control
Toward the earth to crash once more
As all my hopes had done before
To leave my sanity unwound.....
The roller coaster's closing down.

So speak to me no more of love
Or thoughts to raise my head above
The clouds in false expectancy
Of things that are not meant for me.
I'll settle for a merry-go-round.....
The roller coaster's closing down.

[This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 01-03-2000).]
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Michael
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1 posted 01-03-2000 06:44 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Oh my, this seems sad to me.  Life without roller coasters I could not fathom.  I'll never stop thrill seeking me thinks.  I'll be bungi jumping out the rest home windows when I'm 85 should I live that long.  

Great poem, Balladeer.

Michael
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2 posted 01-03-2000 06:49 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Come on Balladeer....you can't just give up! The next ride might just be the best one yet!  Besides, merry-go-rounds just make you dizzy!      Great poem, btw!

 Denise

First__Knight
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3 posted 01-03-2000 06:50 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

Okay okay.....now you have gone and done it Balladeer.....You have gone and done it.   You have just wrote my favorite work of yours.    Life's rollercoasters are hard to live by and I hate to see anything close down.  Seems like when my rollercoaster closes....I will be dead.

 Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you"


Tamera
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4 posted 01-03-2000 06:52 PM       View Profile for Tamera   Email Tamera   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tamera

Balladeer,
You cannot give up! I can understand, still, I agree, the next one just might be the best ride yet! Wonderful poem!
Tamera
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5 posted 01-03-2000 06:53 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

No, folks.  Deer's right.  From now on it's gonna be the Tilt-A-Whirl!

Nice work deer!
poetFemmeFatale
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6 posted 01-03-2000 07:03 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Oh 'Deer, might I just suggest a simple "time-out" from all the dizziness for awhile....Rollercoasters due tend to make one queasy, however - rest for a bit on your merry-go-round, and then jump back on for the thrill of a lifetime when you're sure your hamburger will stay down, ok?  ROFLatchu!  
What a masterpiece you have here!  One of my favs too!  I can surely relate!  ARGH


 ** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000!
Seaangel
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7 posted 01-03-2000 07:08 PM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seaangel

True love is not the rollercoaster, but the person who sits next to you holding your hand during the ride. Don't give up.
hoot_owl_rn
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I absolutely love rollercoasters and the thrill they give. Isn't life itself like a big wild rollercoaster ride full of ups and downs and twists and turns....my only hope is, when it comes to an end, there's someone sitting next to me holding my hand. Wonderful job Balladeer  
Songbird
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9 posted 01-03-2000 07:16 PM       View Profile for Songbird   Email Songbird   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Songbird's Home Page   View IP for Songbird

A really nice piece, I could really feel that rollercoaster and I know the feeling oh so well.  I think that is what life is but we all want to get off and rest awhile. Going to save this one. Thanks for the read.
Marilyn
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10 posted 01-03-2000 07:30 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

I know this feeling well my friend. I love roller coasters but the ride that love gives you is harder. I think giving up on them completely is not the way to go. We need to be more cautious of the ride we choose to take. We must make sure that at the end of the ride there is someone still holding our hand....or maybe more aptly....rubbing our back as we loose our cookies?
Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 01-03-2000 07:32 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Balladeer,
Now you know you can't stop the world and get off. You just wanted to get a rise out of alot of people and you knew just how to do it. Your poetry has always been on a pedestal to me so I don't have to tell you how good this one was. Sy

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12 posted 01-03-2000 07:38 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Good analogy, bad decision.  I have always believed that it is our very nature to love -- to deny that would be to deny ourselves.  You may as well just dig a hole and cover yourself up!  

Thought provoking verse, as usual.

--Kess


 You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

Martie
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Now deer, what about that girl in the shower and you taking pictures--Seriously, great poem and the ride that life takes us on is pretty scary sometimes and not always kind, but well worth the ride.

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
Elizabeth Santos
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14 posted 01-03-2000 07:56 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Mr. Balladeer,
I suggest a nice hot bath
A couple aspirin for your head
Take your mind off rollercoasters
Have a beer and go to bed
I guarantee by tomorrow night
You'll be riding high just like a kite
Incidently, this poem was great!
Liz
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Some of the hills will do this but remember the ride.  I like to think i will find the hill that always climbs. A great poem none the less. Thank you......Bojopy


 

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Some of the hills will do this but
remember the ride.  I like to think i
will find the hill that always climbs.
A great poem none the less. Thank
you......Bojopy


 

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17 posted 01-03-2000 08:04 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Bal: If you ride and feel sick: get off .. however, if you ride and feel exhilarated; sick with apprehension; eyes that feel as though they're on fire, then that's entirely normal...and you can't get off cause life ain't like that, so enjoy the ride and I'll give you a hug when it's over...*g*

Great Poem

HUSG

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.

Balladeer
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18 posted 01-03-2000 08:42 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Ok OK....you guys are all right. I'm claiming poetic license. I never have, and never will, feel this way. I'm the guy clutching the rail with both hands while they're trying to drag me off!!! Your responses are great....and another thing...I had an obvious typo in the first line and not one person tried to draw attention to it in their reply...another reason why you are truly special people. I thank you all...and I thank the poet who was kind enough to point it out in private.

 To the world you might be just one person but to one person you might just be the world.

LngJhnAg
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19 posted 01-03-2000 11:18 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

'Deer

I've got to hand it you, old friend.  Play the part of poor old Mr. Misery, and then scoop up the honeys as they rush to your side to console you in your moment of need.  Man!  Have you been talking to Toerag lately?  This sounds like the nefarious shenanigans of that reprobate scalawag.

(psst, 'Deer - may I use this poem on other boards???  Please?????)

Incidently, this poem flowed so well and was very tight.  Another masterpiece.
Martie
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20 posted 01-03-2000 11:24 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Poetic license--humph! LOL  I knew it all along.
Eloise
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21 posted 01-03-2000 11:31 PM       View Profile for Eloise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Eloise

Balladeer, what can I say that hasn't already been said.  So I'll just stand and clap to the Master instead.

John Foulstone
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22 posted 01-04-2000 12:35 AM       View Profile for John Foulstone   Email John Foulstone   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for John Foulstone

Have you considered the Ferris Wheel? You still get to go up and down, but much more slowly.
Gemini
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23 posted 01-04-2000 12:58 AM       View Profile for Gemini   Email Gemini   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gemini

Balladeer-I'm just starting to get to know all of you, and I can definately say I appreciate your work! Thank you.
Severn
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24 posted 01-04-2000 03:21 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

And the voice today is...of a heart broken man - very convincing there too.

Me like!

K

 ...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara
 
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