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Fulfillment

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Seymour Tabin
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             Fulfillment

Once when in a deep, deep slumber,
I dreamt the earth in shades of umber.
where laid asleep under a tree.
A maid of wondrous beauty to me.

She seemed to sleep enchantments care.
Held in some trance of wizards dare.
And I stood engrossed in spellbound mould,
In fear that I would break sleeps hold.

But my mind raced in careless leaps.
To touch her hair, her nose, her cheeks.
Perhaps to brush with finger tips
And place a kiss upon her lips.

I was in awe of what I saw.
Much, much more than beauties door.
And I breathed titillation sighs
Her lids would open and see my eyes.

And I hovered o'er her like a cover,
Back of my mind, a would be lover.
I gazed and wished and prayed my soul,
That she would wake and fill my goal.

But seems are seems, made up of scheme.
And I have yet to fulfill this dream.
© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
whiskey
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1 posted 01-03-2000 06:38 PM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

Sy,
Beautiful poem , I hope you oneday fulfill your dream  

Julie
Michael
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2 posted 01-03-2000 06:52 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Seems are seems... I love that line.  Good poem, Sy.  Very well done.


Michael
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Seymore...the rhythm in this is so smooth...I liken it to Poe's "The Raven"
Wonderful poem  
Songbird
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4 posted 01-03-2000 07:31 PM       View Profile for Songbird   Email Songbird   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Songbird's Home Page   View IP for Songbird

You have a winner here! Loved it!
Skyfyre
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5 posted 01-03-2000 07:33 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Not the ending I expected, but good nonetheless Seymour!  

--Kess


 You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

Elizabeth Santos
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6 posted 01-03-2000 07:45 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sy,
This is such a beautiful verse, you've taken all the rhyme out of me. And a beautiful story. I agree with Hoot, it is very melodic, one of my favorites.
Love ya,
Liz
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7 posted 01-03-2000 07:53 PM       View Profile for patchoulipumpkin   Email patchoulipumpkin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for patchoulipumpkin

Great!! The last line is brilliant, i fully understand that predicament.  
Denise
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8 posted 01-03-2000 08:21 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Beautiful, Seymour, simply beautiful!

 Denise

Deborah
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What a beautiful poem, interesting ending.  Sometimes dreams become reality in time, I hope this dream comes true for you.
       Deborah
devina
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10 posted 01-03-2000 08:38 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Wish upon the nearest star, my dear, for with words as beautiful as these, there isn't one to resist!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Bojopy
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11 posted 01-03-2000 08:39 PM       View Profile for Bojopy   Email Bojopy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bojopy

WOW!!!!!! I can't describe in words what this says to me....Thank You..........Bojopy

 

Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 01-03-2000 09:24 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Whiskey,
Your comment intoxicates me thank you.
Michael,
Thank you Michael.
Hoot,
Poe is my favorite poet, thank you. &L*
Septsong,
Thank you very much.
Skyfyre,
An end,is an end,is an end, thank you.
Elizabeth,
You are the angel of rhyme
and move me every time. Love Sy
Patch,
Beautiful comment, thank you.
Denise,
Denise the sweet, thank you *L*
Deborah,
Thank you so much.
Devina,
Very sweet comment, thank you.
Bojopy,
Thank you much for the WOW!!!!.
Balladeer
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13 posted 01-03-2000 09:49 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Well, Sy, if this ever happens to you, give me a call and I'll bring bail money. You can't just go around touching sleeping maidens!!!...but it does make for a good poem and, in this case, an excellent one!
Nate Dogg
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14 posted 01-04-2000 06:09 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

You haven't fulfilled your dream
and I see what you mean,
just keep trying,
and you may soon have a chance of defying.

 Nathan
Seymour Tabin
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15 posted 01-04-2000 08:23 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Balladeer,
A friend, is a friend, is a friend. Thanks
Nate,
Thanks for the read and comment.
jaxjoy
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16 posted 01-04-2000 08:32 PM       View Profile for jaxjoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jaxjoy

I enjoyed your poem.  It screams romanticism with a touch of pain. Right up my alley  
Seymour Tabin
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17 posted 01-04-2000 11:10 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Jax,
Enjoyed your comment, thank you.
 
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