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Local Rebel
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Yonder the last twilight
Shining in the sky,
Clouds chase down the sun now,
My throat is feeling dry.

The clinking of a glass here,
And there amongst the din,
Of patrons happy voices,
As I cooly settle in.

The whiff of a robusto,
Can be perceived from far,
A few of the nubilities,
Then scurry from the bar.

The flame ignites the cuban seed,
The afternoon's first draw,
Is always welcome discourse,
To the silence of the thaw.

The barmaid knows my poison,
She gets the glass of Jack,
And places it before me,
"Hey glad to see you're back"

Stirring in the lemon,
The ice spills o'er the top,
The first sip's always hardest,
Except for when to stop.

Night burns down the ashes,
The glasses now are four,
More thirsty for communion,
Now pouring through the door.

Some faces now familiar,
But I’ve yet to learn the names,
They all greet each other,
And embark upon their games.

'Just people' I think to myself,
Like friends you've known before,
But inasmuch as they're the same,
They're different all the more.

To my right there is a ghost,
And to my left I hear it,
So many voices from the past,
And I drink down my spirits.

Across the bar I give a glance,
A fancy lass is there,
She sips her drink and laughs a lot,
Avoiding my brief stare.

They're all so young
It seems to me,
But then there's no place else
To be.

Still… Thirsty



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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 01-03-2000 04:21 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Local,
Let me be the first to say, a wonderful piece of poetry. The stories good and I understood, for few and far the subtleties.
And I will look for more.
Bojopy
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2 posted 01-03-2000 04:30 PM       View Profile for Bojopy   Email Bojopy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bojopy

Local,
I loved this piece.  I was wondering what you you were doing when you thougt this up?..........bojopy


 
Local Rebel
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3 posted 01-03-2000 04:36 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Sipping on Jack Daniels and smoking a Partagas.. LOL

Thanks  
Denise
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4 posted 01-03-2000 04:50 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

A very entertaining tale, Local Rebal! I enjoyed this very much!

 Denise

Tamera
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Local,
Very good! I look forward to seeing more!
Tamera
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6 posted 01-03-2000 04:56 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Well there's probably more on Open#4 than you'll see subsequently, unfortunately.

I post on another board as well.

Thankyou dears... have read yours as well but don't always get time to post.  
Echo Rhayne
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7 posted 01-04-2000 11:37 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Great one L.R

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~
Iloveit
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mmmmmm, a world far from my own, but painted so vividly, it was like I was sitting on the same bar stool with you......lol...ok....so that is my own dream....but I coulda been right beside you.....great writing  
Nan
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What? There's another board somewhere?
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*Clink*

Enjoyed, Sir...
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it's been awhile...
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