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A Sliver of Blue

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Corinne
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0 posted 01-03-2000 01:16 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Corinne

Sliver of Blue

Plowed winter soil of the San Joaquin Valley,
portrait of symmetry in hues of brown.
The eye follows rows of dormant grapevines,
boughs of weeping rust clinging to vines.
To the west, dry hills rise to dusty skies,
and ashen acres mark summer brush fires.

Endless road bisects almond trees,
Few people, a desolate place,
only farmers, migrant workers,
and black and white cow faces,
in that sparse dotting of Tamarisks,
shelter from the sun and ceaseless gusts.

Frequently fatal fog collects chains of car collisions.

The California Aqueduct parallels this road,
Cattle Egret have found new winter homes,
stark white against a sliver of blue.
Tapped to irrigate crops suited for wetter climes,
carrying the liquid of life southward
To L.A. and beyond,
where water is gold.

© 1999 Corinne Bailey

© Copyright 2000 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 01-03-2000 01:36 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

So pitcuresque! As always you paint a lovely scene with your words! ...and your picture! Nice to see you!  

 Denise



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Corinne

This was a terrific picture of the California I remeber.  You have such a remarkable palette (I like your peekshure, too).  I normally stray away from free verse because I have trouble keeping the flow.  Not so with your work.
Local Rebel
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3 posted 01-03-2000 02:25 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Very nice work here!  Each word a pixel.
devina
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4 posted 01-03-2000 02:38 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

I think I'm glad to be living here in California, because I read your poem, and thought "oh I know where that is"  Good free verse hun!

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Bojopy
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5 posted 01-03-2000 02:58 PM       View Profile for Bojopy   Email Bojopy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bojopy

A picture formed in my head when reading this. A wonderful description of somthing I've never seen thank you..........Bojopy


 
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A picture formed in my head when reading this. A wonderful description of somthing I've never seen thank you..........Bojopy


 
Corinne
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7 posted 01-03-2000 03:28 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Thank you, all!  

I've driven this road from Northern California to the Southern tip many times, and the one thing that always occurs to me is that you can't go anywhere in California without the subject of water coming up, usually in hot debate.  Northern California and Colorado provide water to Southern California, fact that Northerners love to point out.  

I am originally from Southern California, so I see it from both perspectives.  The people in the north rally together in times of draught and do their part, while the people in the south just pay more and keep using more water (or so sayeth the northerners!).

It's true that Northern and Southern California are as different as night and day,
but I love both.  And when this state seems like it has lost its magic because of overcrowding, there always places to explore that are free from crowds, like along this route of highway 5.

Thanks again!  Your kind words of encouragement mean more to me than you know!

Corinne
Echo Rhayne
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8 posted 01-04-2000 11:29 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Well living in southern California, and hating California (except for San Fran. and San Diego)  I really dont care, but I probably have to agree with the northerners about the water thing LoL, at least in my valley cause all those darn rich snobs and grrrrrr don't get me started.  Anyway, getting back to the poem, I like it a lot!!


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