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A Sliver of Blue
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A Sliver of Blue |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Sliver of Blue Plowed winter soil of the San Joaquin Valley, portrait of symmetry in hues of brown. The eye follows rows of dormant grapevines, boughs of weeping rust clinging to vines. To the west, dry hills rise to dusty skies, and ashen acres mark summer brush fires. Endless road bisects almond trees, Few people, a desolate place, only farmers, migrant workers, and black and white cow faces, in that sparse dotting of Tamarisks, shelter from the sun and ceaseless gusts. Frequently fatal fog collects chains of car collisions. The California Aqueduct parallels this road, Cattle Egret have found new winter homes, stark white against a sliver of blue. Tapped to irrigate crops suited for wetter climes, carrying the liquid of life southward To L.A. and beyond, where water is gold. © 1999 Corinne Bailey |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
So pitcuresque! As always you paint a lovely scene with your words! ...and your picture! Nice to see you! < !signature--> Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 01-03-2000).] |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Corinne This was a terrific picture of the California I remeber. You have such a remarkable palette (I like your peekshure, too). I normally stray away from free verse because I have trouble keeping the flow. Not so with your work. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Very nice work here! Each word a pixel. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I think I'm glad to be living here in California, because I read your poem, and thought "oh I know where that is" Good free verse hun! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
A picture formed in my head when reading this. A wonderful description of somthing I've never seen thank you..........Bojopy |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
A picture formed in my head when reading this. A wonderful description of somthing I've never seen thank you..........Bojopy |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, all! I've driven this road from Northern California to the Southern tip many times, and the one thing that always occurs to me is that you can't go anywhere in California without the subject of water coming up, usually in hot debate. Northern California and Colorado provide water to Southern California, fact that Northerners love to point out. I am originally from Southern California, so I see it from both perspectives. The people in the north rally together in times of draught and do their part, while the people in the south just pay more and keep using more water (or so sayeth the northerners!). It's true that Northern and Southern California are as different as night and day, but I love both. And when this state seems like it has lost its magic because of overcrowding, there always places to explore that are free from crowds, like along this route of highway 5. Thanks again! Your kind words of encouragement mean more to me than you know! Corinne |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Well living in southern California, and hating California (except for San Fran. and San Diego) I really dont care, but I probably have to agree with the northerners about the water thing LoL, at least in my valley cause all those darn rich snobs and grrrrrr don't get me started. Anyway, getting back to the poem, I like it a lot!! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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