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Weeping Rose

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DreamEvil
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0 posted 01-03-2000 03:45 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Weeping rose
forced to grow
you take no comfort
in your beauty
held back by trellis and twine
pruned by the greedy need
of a selfish man
though your thorns prick his flesh
and make him bleed
still he does not relent
in cutting you down
to fit his designs
yet through this all
remember your fragrance is sweet
and you delight the eye
of every passerby
though your value is lost
and outer beauty obscures duty
Weeping rose
run wild with delight
for yours is the season
and your beauty the reason
men seek deep inside
and try in vain to hide
their longing
for you to adorn their side
Therein lies your pride.


©2000 DreamEvil


 Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©
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"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
(Marquis de Sade)

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Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


1 posted 01-03-2000 03:51 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Beautiful analogy written in here as well as the image of a true rose my friend!
Well done, good job and all the others!  
Julie Jordan Scott
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2 posted 01-03-2000 03:52 AM       View Profile for Julie Jordan Scott   Email Julie Jordan Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Julie Jordan Scott's Home Page   View IP for Julie Jordan Scott

Scott, this one cut into my flesh like a knife....it felt as if you had cut through my exterior and peered inside.  I wonder how many women are prisoners to this same experience?

I suppose the challenge, then, is for us to make the choice to run wild with delight....thank you for reminding me that indeed, I can.
Skyfyre
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Sitting in Michael's Lap


3 posted 01-03-2000 03:55 AM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Only you, my friend, could come up with an analogy like this.  A rose, shaped by the will of another -- "trellis and twine" --brilliant!

And the thorns pricking ... trying to resist ...

WOW!  There isn't enough space for all the things I can read into this.  So I will just say "well done."

--Kess


 You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 01-03-2000 03:58 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Scott...this is lovely. It holds so true. Absolutely beautiful, one of your best pieces I have yet to see. APPLAUDS!!!
Thank you for the read my friend  
Dark Angel
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5 posted 01-03-2000 06:03 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

This is really beautiful Soul-Brother!!  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Meadowmuse
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6 posted 01-03-2000 10:14 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

I admire your poetic insight with this piece...its tone of sadness and beauty is lovely.
Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 01-03-2000 10:18 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

DE,
One of your best, but then I only expect the best from you. Sy
Terrina Kethryveris
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8 posted 01-03-2000 03:00 PM       View Profile for Terrina Kethryveris   Email Terrina Kethryveris   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Terrina Kethryveris

A rose is most beautiful when left wild to grow. 'Tis ashame that most don't realize that in the case of flower or human.

Wonderful poem my friend.  

Terri


 Truth be known, fantasy is much more appealing than reality.
Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 01-03-2000 03:35 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

This is so well written and a truly beautiful piece
Liz
devina
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10 posted 01-03-2000 03:46 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

A beautiful poem, sad in it's ways, but the ending was great!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
caroline
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11 posted 01-03-2000 05:14 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

One word... Magnificent

Well, ok...brilliant, divine, and insightful, too    Bravo, dear!


 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


Denise
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12 posted 01-03-2000 05:53 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

As beautiful as a wild rose!

 Denise

Martie
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13 posted 01-03-2000 06:04 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

A beautiful poem!

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
Seaangel
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14 posted 01-03-2000 06:12 PM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seaangel

Thought-provoking, Dream...another success.
thursdayschild
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15 posted 01-03-2000 07:00 PM       View Profile for thursdayschild   Email thursdayschild   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for thursdayschild

astounding perception coupled with your
poetic ability...a stunning creation.
(as always)  
Thank you for sharing.
DreamEvil
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16 posted 01-04-2000 04:41 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

'Twas inspired (yes I said inspired   ) by the plight of a friend dear to me. I am grateful for the replies but saddened that so many identify with this piece.

Thank you much, the recognition of peers is a prize indeed.
Severn
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17 posted 01-04-2000 05:45 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Wow. This one has thorns all of its own - I like.

Well done, Scott.  K

 ...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara
poetFemmeFatale
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18 posted 01-04-2000 07:52 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

I agree with what Skyfyre and Julie said....I too, have felt prisoner to the idea you share here....fabulous analogy indeed!  This is definately one of your most brilliantly thought out poems yet....I applaude your understanding.  

 ** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000!
JennyLee
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19 posted 01-16-2000 11:55 AM       View Profile for JennyLee   Email JennyLee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JennyLee

Though your value is lost
And outer beauty obscures duty
Weeping Rose run wild with delight.

One of your best  
You know how much the rose means to me  
Excellent analogies all through this one!

Jenny


 Words bloom like flowers that seem astonished at being born.

L. Pirandello
16th Century Dramatist

Parker
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20 posted 01-17-2000 10:53 AM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Very lovely, indeed.

Parker
Justbleu
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21 posted 01-17-2000 01:05 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Dream....I do so enjoy your imagary....I love roses myself....I loved the analogy!!
Thank You!!

Take Care
Bridgette
catslair
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22 posted 01-17-2000 10:09 PM       View Profile for catslair   Email catslair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for catslair

lovely scott........but i also think it talks about the strenght of the natural forces of life.....i really enjoyed it ....thankyou
First__Knight
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23 posted 01-17-2000 10:51 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

SPell bound in its beauty Dream.....One of your best I have read....if not the best.  

 Drive it like you stole it...LOL And another thing...When I rev my engine I want people to think the world is coming to a end....hehehe


Echo Rhayne
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24 posted 01-18-2000 01:47 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Scott, this is exquisite!!


 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~


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