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DreamEvil
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0 posted 2000-01-03 03:45 AM


Weeping rose
forced to grow
you take no comfort
in your beauty
held back by trellis and twine
pruned by the greedy need
of a selfish man
though your thorns prick his flesh
and make him bleed
still he does not relent
in cutting you down
to fit his designs
yet through this all
remember your fragrance is sweet
and you delight the eye
of every passerby
though your value is lost
and outer beauty obscures duty
Weeping rose
run wild with delight
for yours is the season
and your beauty the reason
men seek deep inside
and try in vain to hide
their longing
for you to adorn their side
Therein lies your pride.


©2000 DreamEvil


 Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©
-------------------------------------------------------
"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
(Marquis de Sade)


© Copyright 2000 DreamEvil - All Rights Reserved
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
1 posted 2000-01-03 03:51 AM


Beautiful analogy written in here as well as the image of a true rose my friend!
Well done, good job and all the others!  

Julie Jordan Scott
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since 1999-09-19
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Bakersfield, CA USA
2 posted 2000-01-03 03:52 AM


Scott, this one cut into my flesh like a knife....it felt as if you had cut through my exterior and peered inside.  I wonder how many women are prisoners to this same experience?

I suppose the challenge, then, is for us to make the choice to run wild with delight....thank you for reminding me that indeed, I can.

Skyfyre
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Sitting in Michael's Lap
3 posted 2000-01-03 03:55 AM


Only you, my friend, could come up with an analogy like this.  A rose, shaped by the will of another -- "trellis and twine" --brilliant!

And the thorns pricking ... trying to resist ...

WOW!  There isn't enough space for all the things I can read into this.  So I will just say "well done."

--Kess


 You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.


hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 2000-01-03 03:58 AM


Scott...this is lovely. It holds so true. Absolutely beautiful, one of your best pieces I have yet to see. APPLAUDS!!!
Thank you for the read my friend  

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

5 posted 2000-01-03 06:03 AM


This is really beautiful Soul-Brother!!  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



Meadowmuse
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6 posted 2000-01-03 10:14 AM


I admire your poetic insight with this piece...its tone of sadness and beauty is lovely.
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
7 posted 2000-01-03 10:18 AM


DE,
One of your best, but then I only expect the best from you. Sy

Terrina Kethryveris
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since 1999-12-06
Posts 53
USA
8 posted 2000-01-03 03:00 PM


A rose is most beautiful when left wild to grow. 'Tis ashame that most don't realize that in the case of flower or human.

Wonderful poem my friend.  

Terri


 Truth be known, fantasy is much more appealing than reality.

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
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Pennsylvania
9 posted 2000-01-03 03:35 PM


This is so well written and a truly beautiful piece
Liz

devina
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Cali
10 posted 2000-01-03 03:46 PM


A beautiful poem, sad in it's ways, but the ending was great!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

caroline
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11 posted 2000-01-03 05:14 PM


One word... Magnificent

Well, ok...brilliant, divine, and insightful, too    Bravo, dear!


 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain



Denise
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12 posted 2000-01-03 05:53 PM


As beautiful as a wild rose!

 Denise


Martie
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13 posted 2000-01-03 06:04 PM


A beautiful poem!

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)

Seaangel
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Auckland, New Zealand
14 posted 2000-01-03 06:12 PM


Thought-provoking, Dream...another success.
thursdayschild
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Houston, Tx.
15 posted 2000-01-03 07:00 PM


astounding perception coupled with your
poetic ability...a stunning creation.
(as always)  
Thank you for sharing.

DreamEvil
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Posts 2396

16 posted 2000-01-04 04:41 AM


'Twas inspired (yes I said inspired   ) by the plight of a friend dear to me. I am grateful for the replies but saddened that so many identify with this piece.

Thank you much, the recognition of peers is a prize indeed.

Severn
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since 1999-07-17
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17 posted 2000-01-04 05:45 AM


Wow. This one has thorns all of its own - I like.

Well done, Scott.  K

 ...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara

poetFemmeFatale
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18 posted 2000-01-04 07:52 PM


I agree with what Skyfyre and Julie said....I too, have felt prisoner to the idea you share here....fabulous analogy indeed!  This is definately one of your most brilliantly thought out poems yet....I applaude your understanding.  

 ** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000!

JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
19 posted 2000-01-16 11:55 AM


Though your value is lost
And outer beauty obscures duty
Weeping Rose run wild with delight.

One of your best  
You know how much the rose means to me  
Excellent analogies all through this one!

Jenny


 Words bloom like flowers that seem astonished at being born.

L. Pirandello
16th Century Dramatist


Parker
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ON
20 posted 2000-01-17 10:53 AM


Very lovely, indeed.

Parker

Justbleu
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Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)
21 posted 2000-01-17 01:05 PM


Dream....I do so enjoy your imagary....I love roses myself....I loved the analogy!!
Thank You!!

Take Care
Bridgette

catslair
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since 2000-01-16
Posts 48

22 posted 2000-01-17 10:09 PM


lovely scott........but i also think it talks about the strenght of the natural forces of life.....i really enjoyed it ....thankyou
First__Knight
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 678

23 posted 2000-01-17 10:51 PM


SPell bound in its beauty Dream.....One of your best I have read....if not the best.  

 Drive it like you stole it...LOL And another thing...When I rev my engine I want people to think the world is coming to a end....hehehe



Echo Rhayne
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24 posted 2000-01-18 01:47 AM


Scott, this is exquisite!!


 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~



HelmutB
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 964
Canada
25 posted 2000-01-18 08:20 AM


I don't know how I could overlook such beautiful poetry, well I guess I didn't after all  

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


TexUS
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26 posted 2004-08-10 07:59 PM


Truly exceptional-an amazing piece of art.
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