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Awakening

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whiskey
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" Awakening "

Gently I stir gently I rise
Death of a newborn awakening
Rapt with funeral arrangements

What is the young girl learning
Life's games?
Or of ghost spirits flying free

Stuttering, chattering, blindly seeing
The annoyance of the death of a soul

© Copyright 2000 Julie Nelson - All Rights Reserved
Fred Hobbs
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1 posted 01-03-2000 09:37 AM       View Profile for Fred Hobbs   Email Fred Hobbs   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Fred Hobbs's Home Page   View IP for Fred Hobbs

Oops!

Whiskey, This poem is excellent!  It's both thought-provoking and entertaining (as all of your poems seem to be).  Nice job. . .
Local Rebel
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2 posted 01-04-2000 05:50 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

too nice to be buried in the back...

sorry I missed this one.. very nice!
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Excellent, thought provoking poem, Whiskey! Very well done!

 Denise

agony
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Whiskey,nice poem it is very
awakeing for sure.I like the touch you have with your words,they seem to be soft even though they are hard.

 
hoot_owl_rn
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Wow...what a thinker  
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Great for the thinker type thank you
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I like this Whiskey - it is deep, yet accessible. Great job!

K

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