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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2000-01-03 12:37 PM


-housedown-
Bombs overthrow their spouting smoke.
The trees out front, made of burning boughs.
Against the charred gate, knobs of grapes.
Dashed seeded centers, the house a fallen shape.

The daylit sky outgrows its swallowed smoke.
The dusktime moon hues the glowing ruin.
Watch the rubbled hand try escape.
The window is starburst cracked, unneatly broken.

Crushed by everything that mattered to it once when,
The hand finds a penny on the sill.
The coin shines like a glassmade ring through the pane.
But copper does not absolve god's will.

copyright 2000 Mike Chmielecki

© Copyright 2000 MPC - All Rights Reserved
Poet deVine
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1 posted 2000-01-03 12:51 PM


Welcome to the Passions family! Impressive first poem sir! I look forward to reading more from you!  

Marilyn
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2 posted 2000-01-03 01:10 AM


Impressive first poem indeed! Welcome to Passions and I too shall be looking for you again.  
Paul Hoekman
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3 posted 2000-01-03 01:27 AM


BEAUTIFUL,DEEP,HEAVY! !
  This is the place for you,
    Welcome Home,
             Paul

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4 posted 2000-01-03 02:34 AM


Great first post Welcome  

Julie

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5 posted 2000-01-03 09:08 AM


A strong first posting, indeed.    
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6 posted 2000-01-03 11:00 AM


What haunting images you've fashioned here. I love the hand finding the penny on the sill. Wonderful.
Nan
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7 posted 2000-01-03 12:52 PM


Oh yeah - More talent is good....
Welcome.....

Denise
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8 posted 2000-01-03 01:47 PM


Welcome to Passions, Mike! This is quite impressive writing!

 Denise


bsquirrel
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9 posted 2000-01-03 11:07 PM


Thanks for the praise, all.   I'm glad you enjoyed the poem so much. I was actually kinda nervous showing it. Just goes to show -- sometimes you've gotta take that jump. Thanks again!

Mike

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10 posted 2000-01-05 11:09 AM


Mike, yes sometimes you do just have to take that jump, and I must agree with everyone it is avery impressive first poem!!  Welcome to passions!

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~

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11 posted 2002-05-22 07:14 PM


Wow, my first post. How far I've come. How short I've fallen. lol

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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