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bsquirrel
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-housedown-
Bombs overthrow their spouting smoke.
The trees out front, made of burning boughs.
Against the charred gate, knobs of grapes.
Dashed seeded centers, the house a fallen shape.

The daylit sky outgrows its swallowed smoke.
The dusktime moon hues the glowing ruin.
Watch the rubbled hand try escape.
The window is starburst cracked, unneatly broken.

Crushed by everything that mattered to it once when,
The hand finds a penny on the sill.
The coin shines like a glassmade ring through the pane.
But copper does not absolve god's will.

copyright 2000 Mike Chmielecki
© Copyright 2000 MPC - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 01-03-2000 12:51 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Welcome to the Passions family! Impressive first poem sir! I look forward to reading more from you!  
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Impressive first poem indeed! Welcome to Passions and I too shall be looking for you again.  
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BEAUTIFUL,DEEP,HEAVY! !
  This is the place for you,
    Welcome Home,
             Paul
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4 posted 01-03-2000 02:34 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

Great first post Welcome  

Julie
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A strong first posting, indeed.    
Meadowmuse
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What haunting images you've fashioned here. I love the hand finding the penny on the sill. Wonderful.
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Oh yeah - More talent is good....
Welcome.....
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Welcome to Passions, Mike! This is quite impressive writing!

 Denise

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Thanks for the praise, all.   I'm glad you enjoyed the poem so much. I was actually kinda nervous showing it. Just goes to show -- sometimes you've gotta take that jump. Thanks again!

Mike
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Mike, yes sometimes you do just have to take that jump, and I must agree with everyone it is avery impressive first poem!!  Welcome to passions!

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~
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11 posted 05-22-2002 07:14 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Wow, my first post. How far I've come. How short I've fallen. lol

She said burn ... together.
-TON

 
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