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Meadowmuse
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0 posted 2000-01-02 03:57 AM



The Question

How can the Night
come clutching,
clawing so?
Clamoring and cloven,
at barely the midst
of our once endless day?
Your keep is too close,
mourning's Master,
morose!
Take leave,
narrow Night!
Do not linger.
Leave us breathing,
ever clinging
by fragile finger,
to those severed moments
between jest and gesture
when life stills,
hushed,
hovering,
in sudden sequester,
and droplet
by precious droplet
is ever rained
into the drought
of the weakened vein
that begs
only,
with frightened refrain,
to be fed
another,
yet again
and
again.


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DreamEvil
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1 posted 2000-01-02 04:12 AM


It seeps deep into your soul and though terrifying, the Dark of night can be as comforting as the womb. Excellently done.

 Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©
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because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
(Marquis de Sade)


devina
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2 posted 2000-01-02 04:56 AM


You've conjured up some amazing images dear, good job!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Nan
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3 posted 2000-01-02 10:01 AM


With each sunset, there's a glorious sunrise in the making....
Coegwyr
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4 posted 2000-01-02 12:08 PM


Guess which fool missed this gem when it was first posted!!

Thanks for the clue  

Craig

 Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool:
But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet.


Martie
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5 posted 2000-01-02 12:10 PM


Love the way you used words here, excellent writing.
caroline
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6 posted 2000-01-02 12:13 PM


Superb writing, this is...fantastic free verse!  Love it  

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain



Mike
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7 posted 2000-01-02 12:15 PM


I envy your talents.
Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2000-01-02 12:21 PM


Meadowmuse,
I agree with all the above, Enjoy your writings very much. Sy

Denise
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9 posted 2000-01-02 12:32 PM


Ditto to all of the above! Excellent verse, indeed!  

 Denise


hoot_owl_rn
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10 posted 2000-01-02 01:19 PM


Nice images, this one just kind of reaches out and grabs you  
Poet deVine
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11 posted 2000-01-02 01:20 PM


Free verse is so hard..but you did a magnificent job here!  
mama duck
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12 posted 2000-01-02 01:28 PM


Very well done!!
Meadowmuse
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13 posted 2000-01-02 04:15 PM


Thank you, one and all, for your generous comments. I wrote this during recent reflection upon my sister's approaching death. The questions are, at times, overwhelming.
Echo Rhayne
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14 posted 2000-01-04 02:33 AM


WOW!!!!!

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~

Severn
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15 posted 2000-01-04 03:05 AM


Excellent, meadow - very very excellent.

K

 ...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara

Meadowmuse
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16 posted 2000-01-04 06:26 AM


Echo Rhayne and Severn, thank you for reading my poem, and for taking time to respond.

Dear LadyClaire


Elizabeth Santos
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17 posted 2000-01-04 07:27 AM


Meadowmuse, Your writing takes us "between jest and jesture" in a very excellnt piece of writing. You are one of those I so admire in the writing of free verse
Liz

Meadowmuse
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18 posted 2000-01-04 08:00 AM


Elizabeth ~ thank you. I enjoy free verse, though I'm still very much a neophyte to the craft. This forum is such a treasure...I've read so much fine work here with you all!

Dear LadyClaire


whiskey
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19 posted 2000-01-04 09:17 AM


Wonderful Imagery , I like this  
Meadowmuse
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20 posted 2000-01-04 10:47 AM


Thank you, Whiskey.

Dear LadyClaire



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21 posted 2000-01-08 09:51 PM


Claire -
Realistic thoughts ... it grabbed me.
~Marge~

Eloise
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22 posted 2000-01-08 10:04 PM


Excellent writing meadowmuse.  You do justice to free verse.
Femme's Father
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23 posted 2000-01-08 10:13 PM


Again I say, you have overwhelmed me with your beautiful speech of words that paint such magnificent pictures. You would make such a great artist, also. I always struggle for the words to express myself and you seem to flow so easily, so descriptively, so fluidly, so - oh I don't know how to say what I feel when I read your works. I am always drawn to your posts..Love the words you use to picture your thoughts into my soul. Truly magnificent..and I'm not just blowing smoke,Ok?  God bless you even more...
     james david

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