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Meadowmuse
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0 posted 01-02-2000 03:57 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse


The Question

How can the Night
come clutching,
clawing so?
Clamoring and cloven,
at barely the midst
of our once endless day?
Your keep is too close,
mourning's Master,
morose!
Take leave,
narrow Night!
Do not linger.
Leave us breathing,
ever clinging
by fragile finger,
to those severed moments
between jest and gesture
when life stills,
hushed,
hovering,
in sudden sequester,
and droplet
by precious droplet
is ever rained
into the drought
of the weakened vein
that begs
only,
with frightened refrain,
to be fed
another,
yet again
and
again.

© Copyright 2000 Meadowmuse - All Rights Reserved
DreamEvil
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1 posted 01-02-2000 04:12 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

It seeps deep into your soul and though terrifying, the Dark of night can be as comforting as the womb. Excellently done.

 Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvilŠ
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"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
(Marquis de Sade)

devina
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2 posted 01-02-2000 04:56 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

You've conjured up some amazing images dear, good job!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Nan
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3 posted 01-02-2000 10:01 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

With each sunset, there's a glorious sunrise in the making....
Coegwyr
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4 posted 01-02-2000 12:08 PM       View Profile for Coegwyr   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Coegwyr

Guess which fool missed this gem when it was first posted!!

Thanks for the clue  

Craig

 Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool:
But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet.

Martie
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5 posted 01-02-2000 12:10 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Love the way you used words here, excellent writing.
caroline
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6 posted 01-02-2000 12:13 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Superb writing, this is...fantastic free verse!  Love it  

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


Mike
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7 posted 01-02-2000 12:15 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

I envy your talents.
Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 01-02-2000 12:21 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Meadowmuse,
I agree with all the above, Enjoy your writings very much. Sy
Denise
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9 posted 01-02-2000 12:32 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Ditto to all of the above! Excellent verse, indeed!  

 Denise

hoot_owl_rn
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Nice images, this one just kind of reaches out and grabs you  
Poet deVine
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Free verse is so hard..but you did a magnificent job here!  
mama duck
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Very well done!!
Meadowmuse
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13 posted 01-02-2000 04:15 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Thank you, one and all, for your generous comments. I wrote this during recent reflection upon my sister's approaching death. The questions are, at times, overwhelming.
Echo Rhayne
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14 posted 01-04-2000 02:33 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

WOW!!!!!

 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~
Severn
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15 posted 01-04-2000 03:05 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Excellent, meadow - very very excellent.

K

 ...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara
Meadowmuse
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Echo Rhayne and Severn, thank you for reading my poem, and for taking time to respond.

Dear LadyClaire

Elizabeth Santos
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Meadowmuse, Your writing takes us "between jest and jesture" in a very excellnt piece of writing. You are one of those I so admire in the writing of free verse
Liz
Meadowmuse
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18 posted 01-04-2000 08:00 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Elizabeth ~ thank you. I enjoy free verse, though I'm still very much a neophyte to the craft. This forum is such a treasure...I've read so much fine work here with you all!

Dear LadyClaire

whiskey
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Wonderful Imagery , I like this  
Meadowmuse
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20 posted 01-04-2000 10:47 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Thank you, Whiskey.

Dear LadyClaire


Marge Tindal
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21 posted 01-08-2000 09:51 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Claire -
Realistic thoughts ... it grabbed me.
~Marge~
Eloise
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Excellent writing meadowmuse.  You do justice to free verse.
Femme's Father
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23 posted 01-08-2000 10:13 PM       View Profile for Femme's Father   Email Femme's Father   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Femme's Father

Again I say, you have overwhelmed me with your beautiful speech of words that paint such magnificent pictures. You would make such a great artist, also. I always struggle for the words to express myself and you seem to flow so easily, so descriptively, so fluidly, so - oh I don't know how to say what I feel when I read your works. I am always drawn to your posts..Love the words you use to picture your thoughts into my soul. Truly magnificent..and I'm not just blowing smoke,Ok?  God bless you even more...
     james david
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