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Red
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0 posted 01-01-2000 09:17 PM       View Profile for Red   Email Red   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Red


Okay, I'm new here and I've spent the past few hours reading the lovely poetry that this site offers..... I've been here before a few months ago and submitted some poetry but I guess nothing ever came of it or else it just takes a long time?  Anyways, I absolutley love this site, it's GREAT and I guess I just wanted to try posting something.  Nothing ventured, nothing gained!  Happy holidays by the way!!!


SHATTERED

Tiny fragements of glass,
embed themselves here.
Cutting.
Tearing.
Shredding.
Ripping open and revealing,
this lonely blood-soaked void.
They have severed,
the vein of love.
They have pierced,
the pulse of joy.
Nothing left,
but the persistant flow of blood.
Dripping.
Dousing.
Drenching.
The gleam of shattered glass,
frosted in brilliant shades of red.
Cracked.
Broken.
Unrepairable.
Blood seeps from the core,

my heart.

"I am become death, shatterer of worlds." Robert J. Openheimer
© Copyright 2000 Melissa - All Rights Reserved
whiskey
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1 posted 01-01-2000 09:20 PM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

So Sad , Very well done , Welcome  
Denise
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2 posted 01-01-2000 09:23 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Welcome to Passions, Red! Great poem! Excellent imagery!

 Denise

Ted Reynolds
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3 posted 01-01-2000 09:26 PM       View Profile for Ted Reynolds   Email Ted Reynolds   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ted Reynolds

Ouch!  And you seemed so cheerful at first, Red.  Can't wait to see what you post when you're miserable.
Astraea
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4 posted 01-01-2000 09:30 PM       View Profile for Astraea   Email Astraea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Astraea

What a lovely poem and it hits so close to home, too.  Welcome to Passions!  Very nice.

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

Poet deVine
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5 posted 01-01-2000 09:33 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Welcome to the family! Good poem with some great imagery. I look forward to  reading more from you.  
Red
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6 posted 01-01-2000 10:25 PM       View Profile for Red   Email Red   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Red

Thank you oh so kindly for the feedback everyone and Ted------ I am a happy person and rarely miserable (outwardly anyways)... poetry and music are the only places, it seems, that I have to vent!!!
RainbowGirl
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7 posted 01-01-2000 10:37 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Red: Sounds like you're in need of a hug, so:

HUGS

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.

Nan
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8 posted 01-01-2000 11:33 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Welcome to Passions, Red - Nice to have you with us...




[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 01-01-2000).]
hoot_owl_rn
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9 posted 01-01-2000 11:57 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Welcome to passions...you got some pretty vivid imagery going on there  
mama duck
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10 posted 01-01-2000 11:58 PM       View Profile for mama duck   Email mama duck   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mama duck

Hi Red,
Are your name and this poem related? I know many of us have felt this level of heart shattering pain. You've captured the agony well. Very nicely done. Chris
Echo Rhayne
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11 posted 01-02-2000 01:20 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Wonderful poem, and welcome to passions!


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~

Fred Hobbs
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12 posted 01-03-2000 10:10 AM       View Profile for Fred Hobbs   Email Fred Hobbs   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Fred Hobbs's Home Page   View IP for Fred Hobbs

Very nice work Red.  Very vivid!  Wecome to Passions. . .
Seymour Tabin
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13 posted 01-03-2000 10:23 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Red,
Good paint, nice job, well done, welcome.
Pepper
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14 posted 01-03-2000 11:07 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Terrific imagery Red.....Nice work!
Welcome to Passions!!  

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon


 
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