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Red
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0 posted 2000-01-01 09:17 PM



Okay, I'm new here and I've spent the past few hours reading the lovely poetry that this site offers..... I've been here before a few months ago and submitted some poetry but I guess nothing ever came of it or else it just takes a long time?  Anyways, I absolutley love this site, it's GREAT and I guess I just wanted to try posting something.  Nothing ventured, nothing gained!  Happy holidays by the way!!!


SHATTERED

Tiny fragements of glass,
embed themselves here.
Cutting.
Tearing.
Shredding.
Ripping open and revealing,
this lonely blood-soaked void.
They have severed,
the vein of love.
They have pierced,
the pulse of joy.
Nothing left,
but the persistant flow of blood.
Dripping.
Dousing.
Drenching.
The gleam of shattered glass,
frosted in brilliant shades of red.
Cracked.
Broken.
Unrepairable.
Blood seeps from the core,

my heart.

"I am become death, shatterer of worlds." Robert J. Openheimer

© Copyright 2000 Melissa - All Rights Reserved
whiskey
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1 posted 2000-01-01 09:20 PM


So Sad , Very well done , Welcome  
Denise
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2 posted 2000-01-01 09:23 PM


Welcome to Passions, Red! Great poem! Excellent imagery!

 Denise


Ted Reynolds
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3 posted 2000-01-01 09:26 PM


Ouch!  And you seemed so cheerful at first, Red.  Can't wait to see what you post when you're miserable.
Astraea
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since 1999-11-09
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4 posted 2000-01-01 09:30 PM


What a lovely poem and it hits so close to home, too.  Welcome to Passions!  Very nice.

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."


Poet deVine
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5 posted 2000-01-01 09:33 PM


Welcome to the family! Good poem with some great imagery. I look forward to  reading more from you.  
Red
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6 posted 2000-01-01 10:25 PM


Thank you oh so kindly for the feedback everyone and Ted------ I am a happy person and rarely miserable (outwardly anyways)... poetry and music are the only places, it seems, that I have to vent!!!
RainbowGirl
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7 posted 2000-01-01 10:37 PM


Red: Sounds like you're in need of a hug, so:

HUGS

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.


Nan
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8 posted 2000-01-01 11:33 PM


Welcome to Passions, Red - Nice to have you with us...




[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 01-01-2000).]

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
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9 posted 2000-01-01 11:57 PM


Welcome to passions...you got some pretty vivid imagery going on there  
mama duck
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since 1999-12-31
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Northern California
10 posted 2000-01-01 11:58 PM


Hi Red,
Are your name and this poem related? I know many of us have felt this level of heart shattering pain. You've captured the agony well. Very nicely done. Chris

Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
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Canyon Country, CA
11 posted 2000-01-02 01:20 AM


Wonderful poem, and welcome to passions!


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~


Fred Hobbs
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12 posted 2000-01-03 10:10 AM


Very nice work Red.  Very vivid!  Wecome to Passions. . .
Seymour Tabin
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13 posted 2000-01-03 10:23 AM


Red,
Good paint, nice job, well done, welcome.

Pepper
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14 posted 2000-01-03 11:07 AM


Terrific imagery Red.....Nice work!
Welcome to Passions!!  

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon



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