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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Masquerade Your sly slick way feigns savoir faire; Your craftiness is cloaked with flair; With such finesse you play the game But treachery is thy true name; Antithesis of integrity Of all virtue, all nobility; Fidelity you’ve fast betrayed; Your constancy is sheer charade; Lese-majesty’s the crown you wear; The realm you rule is sure despair; Pure perfidy has been portrayed; Duplicity – thy shame’s displayed. 2/99 Denise |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
This I like... much. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
It is too bad that there are such. Great poem Denise. In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
THis is fantastic Denise....the wording is great  I have learned that the pain of a lost love will fade, But the memory of having loved will last forever. |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Wonderful Poem, Denise Just is sad that there is such souls Julie |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Whew...I know a few who fit this one Nicely stated |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
So well done, Denise! But who is this guy? Great poem! Liz |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you, Mike, Martie, First Knight, Whiskey, Ruth and Elizabeth for reading and commenting. Is is always appreciated! Yes, it is a shame that there are people like this in the world. I haven't come across too many, though, but then even one is more than enough. Elizabeth - Not a guy, a woman. Who is she? Nobody important, anymore. But, thanks for asking. < !signature--> Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 01-01-2000).] |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Denise this is so sad! Beautifully written...I've been there too and you're right, one is too many! <*\\\>< Where there is faith, there is love. Where there is love, there is peace. Where there is peace, there is GOD. Where there is GOD, there is no need. Hallmark |
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mama duck Junior Member
since 1999-12-31
Posts 41Northern California |
Denise, This is very nice. Surely there are quite a few people this awful, we all know some. And there are many far, far worse. How clearly, (and in so few words), a well done poem conveys such a clear and understood picture. Wonderful. Chris |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Denise, you state your feelings weel with this one. It is a shame there are poeple like this. And you are right, even one is more than enough! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Tamera Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 121 |
I agree with everyone here, interesting how we learn and these people do not become so important anymore..here's to growth! Great poem! Tamera |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Such a skillfully crafted and stinging piece of work. Wonderful end line. Nicely read aloud...an exercise in enunciation, to be sure. [This message has been edited by Meadowmuse (edited 01-02-2000).] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
d very nicely put twas this every line a killer in perfectoness |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
I am particularly impressed by the formatting as it resembles a woman's figure. 'Tis verse steeped in truth. Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Nicely done, Denise - I'm glad she's no longer an issue for you....Let the sun shine in!!  |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you, Rebecca, Chris, Echo, Tamera, Meadowmuse, Walt, Dream and Nan for reading and commenting. The person who inspired this has surely been a test in forgiveness for me. I still struggle with it, although, I have come a long way, but only with the help of God whose forgiveness of us is far and above what any of us deserves for sure! Dream- I wish the formatting were intentional, but, alas, I am not that creative! But thanks anyway for noticing! Denise |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Well done Denise!!! (as if anything you write is less!  ) This one packs quite the punch. Brava! It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thanks so much, Caroline, for your kind comments! I'm glad you enjoyed it!Denise |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is great! Very well done! But yanno... I'd be willing to bet she wouldn't recognize herself... no matter how well you described her... people like that don't! *G* |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You're probably right, Suthern. Thanks for reading and commenting! Denise |
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broker6 Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 132Bellevue, NE, Sarpy |
Okay, kiddo. Every writer knows that these things aren't made up. We always write about ourselves . . .  ) So who is he? |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You are correct, Broker, this is not made up! (some of my writings are, though!) I find it interesting, though, that people assumed it was a guy! It's not about a guy. Thanks for reading and commenting!Denise |
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