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If I could be the world to you.
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If I could be the world to you. |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678
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If I could be the world to you, ~First Knight~ If I could be the world to you, I think I would be a star, High above this world I'd be, watching from afar. If I could be the world to you, I think I would be the sea. Water I would give to you, Drinking just from me. If I could be the world to you, I think I would be the moon. Shining bright in darkness, Medicine from my spoon. If I could be the world to you, I think I would be the Sun. Greetings in the morning, My giving never done. If I could be the world to you, I think I would be space, Giving you all the room you need, Yet found in every place. If I could be the world to you, I think I would be the rain, Wash away your troubles, Wash them down the drain, If I could be the world to you, I think it is quite clear, Nothing I wouldn't do for you, Nothing my sweet dear. I have learned that the pain of a lost love will fade, But the memory of having loved will last forever. |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Poignantly beautiful! It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful! I hope your wishes come true! Denise |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
First Knight: Superb!!!..You romantic little devil...*sigh*..  HUGS Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
So beautiful , and a wonderful poem your so very talented , I too hope your dreams come true Julie |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
With words as sweet as these, I don't see how she could refuse! Good luck to you and may love lead you into the new year! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Tara and Densie thank you for your writings always show beauty and I know you know what that is. RainbowGirl...Hummm Romance ...hehe you my dear have the that..I have seen it Wiskey- Thank you my dreams are a little closer each day, Devina- Maybe I should send you to her as my diplomat.....hehe Thank you I have learned that the pain of a lost love will fade, But the memory of having loved will last forever. |
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Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
I like what you've done here. It's good to see a poem with structure under it. So many have no bones. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
If that star should fall Would you catch it in the air And grasp it from the sky for me For you and I to share? If the seas would all go dry I ask of you, what then Would you go to oceans wide And fill them all again? And if the moonlight faded Giving rise to dark Would the love you have for me Guide me with it's spark? And if the sunlight faltered If morning never came In the dark that once was day Would you feel the same? And in the vastness of all space All distance and all time Would you find your way to me To prove that you were mine? If the raindrops never ceased And water claimed the land Would you then set sail to find me To hold onto my hand? And if you were the world to me The rain, the skies, the space Would I see a love that's true When I looked upon your face? Very beautiful poem David, as you can see...inspiring |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent poem, David. ...and, Hoot, even as an innocent bystander, I think I can answer the questions your poem asks.  |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
You question what I give to thee, My heart is bleeding well. Crushed beneath your words of doubt Ending life and dreams about. Doing all I can do, Being close and loving you. Lost within your words I do fall, Without your faith I feel so small. I have learned that the pain of a lost love will fade, But the memory of having loved will last forever. |
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Red Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 143Ca |
Beautiful poem..... God, I wish I could meet a man like you.lol Passionate, I love it.. it brought tears to my overly emotional eyes. |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
Very lovely. Very beautiful. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
I do so love to see the beginning... May the stars keep shining on you...isn't love just simply wonderful?HUGS Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I don't mean to cause your heart to bleed That was never my intention And how your words they touch my heart So I need some protection I can not give my heart to you Not in your situation Having my one heart broke in two Doesn't figure in my equation |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
FK this is absolutely beautiful!!! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
What a way with words you have, your emotions bleed right through. If we could all have a romantic like you the world would be in glee. Sometimes packing to much into your suitcase makes for a heavy load. |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
THank you all so much for your kindness Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you" |
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patchoulipumpkin Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 196Bermuda |
REally cool. I especially like the line, if i could be the world to you, i think i would be space, giving you all the room you need, yet found in every place. REally well written. thanks man. |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Thank you Patch....and welcome to Passions Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you" |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Very beautiful F.K. A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Julie Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739Houston, TX |
So sweet F.K., I really like the verse about giving space...excellent. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Very Romantic! I love this!  *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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Tamera Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 121 |
Very beautiful..I can't think of a woman that would not want to hear these words... Tamera |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Thank you Tamera, Pepper, Alwye and Julie your are very nice Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you" |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Okay First Knight, another wonderful poem. If this doesn't melt her heart, nothing will. |
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