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An Acrostic Sonnet

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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 01-01-2000 08:21 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

In the Wake of a Millennium
A Prayer for my Sponsored Child

May happiness be yours throughout the year
Beside a warming hearth of love and care
In safety and in warmth and free from fear
Content in faith, and love in God's aware

Protected from the hands of evil souls
Enriched by all the wonders you embrace
Not ever deviating from your goals
To learn and live with pride upon your face

And may your loved ones find prosperity
May each one seek to find a better way
Equipped to conquer life's severity
These are the things I pray for New Years Day

Embrace these blessings from a loving heart
Roberto Carlos, son so far apart


Elizabeth Santos


[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 01-01-2000).]
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whiskey
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1 posted 01-01-2000 09:16 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

A beautiful Prayer I hope it all comes to be life for your sponser child  
hoot_owl_rn
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Smiling...what a wonderful prayer Liz... check your e-mail  
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Just beautiful Liz......
Have you sent this to Roberto?

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon


Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 01-01-2000 11:17 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Thanks for the comments
I am happy in the structure of this verse but not the poem itself. I wrote this so hurriedly, but this could be more fluid and
more beautiful a sonnet. It doesn't sing to me, and that's what poetry should do, especially a sonnet. I've got a long road ahead yet to master this form, but I appreciate your comments. Thanks Hoot for the e-mail
Liz
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5 posted 01-01-2000 11:20 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

It sings to me, Elizabeth! Excellent acrostic, too!  

 Denise

Elizabeth Santos
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I'm humbly bowing to the Queen of Sonnets
Thanks, Denise
Echo Rhayne
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Absolutely beautiful!


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~

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8 posted 01-01-2000 02:23 PM       View Profile for jbouder   Email jbouder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jbouder

Excellent sonnet, Elizabeth.  

 Jim

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Nan
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Elizabeth, we're usually our own worst critics... You're no exception... This is a lovely sonnet...
Elizabeth Santos
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10 posted 01-01-2000 03:33 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Echo and Jim, Thanks so much

Nan, appreciate your help and your comments
Thank you
Liz
Michael
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11 posted 01-01-2000 04:11 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

I think you made Nan's day with the Iambic pentameter thing.  I agree with her though, you are your own worst critic, this is very good.

Michael
 
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