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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I feel your music touch my soul, Where once was broken, now am whole, Within my heart feel Eros' lance, As two are one in passion's dance, The gentle kiss of evening's breeze, Embracing in love's harmonies, You sing to me love's madrigal, As from the heavens, moonbeams fall, Song's warm caress my heart enthralls, As come to me my Venus calls, We dance as one to Gershwin score, Until the dawn and night's no more, With rising sun the music halts, And so does end our lover's waltz, Within my heart dance shall remain, 'Til night returns with song's refrain. |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
I could feel the music in that one! Super! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Ahhhh....so beautiful! I could hear the music too!  Denise |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful! So lyrical...... Thank you... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Not only applauding here, but dancing with joy...oh, this is so beautiful. It reads like a song |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Thank you muchly. Hope all you dance cards were filled last night. *smile* |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Oh so lovely Mike! A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
...I'm Dancin'......   |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
hey at least I am not dancing alone =o) Tis truly great! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Uh....Nan, I fear your toes are gonna break off if you don't slow down a bit there......ROFLMAO !  That high speed bellydancing can be quite fatal - ya know! Parts start flying!!! heheOn a serious note Mike, I envy your ability of perfect rhyme & meter! It was flawless - 8 syllables throughout! That's why it reads like a song! Outstanding - I love perfect meter, however I struggle sometimes to get mine to "click" as effortlessly as yours does here! Bravo!!! I shall work harder, indeed! You have shown me it is possible! hehe - - - If I can just touch you once, then I feel I have accomplished what I am called to do...- - pFF |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Magnificent piece, Mike. You know, people can talk syllables and meter all they want but without passion, it's just plain flat no matter how well written. But then, to see passion melded with such perfect form, truly there is nothing more beautiful. Michael |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Wonderful, I too can hear the music |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Thank you all for your very gracious comments. |
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