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Mike
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0 posted 12-31-1999 07:08 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mike


I feel your music touch my soul,
Where once was broken, now am whole,
Within my heart feel Eros' lance,
As two are one in passion's dance,
The gentle kiss of evening's breeze,
Embracing in love's harmonies,
You sing to me love's madrigal,
As from the heavens, moonbeams fall,
Song's warm caress my heart enthralls,
As come to me my Venus calls,
We dance as one to Gershwin score,
Until the dawn and night's no more,
With rising sun the music halts,
And so does end our lover's waltz,
Within my heart dance shall remain,
'Til night returns with song's refrain.
© Copyright 1999 Mike - All Rights Reserved
sandgrain
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1 posted 12-31-1999 07:14 PM       View Profile for sandgrain   Email sandgrain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sandgrain

I could feel the music in that one!  Super!
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2 posted 12-31-1999 07:57 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Ahhhh....so beautiful! I could hear the music too!  

 Denise

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3 posted 12-31-1999 08:04 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Beautiful! So lyrical...... Thank you...  
hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 12-31-1999 08:47 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Not only applauding here, but dancing with joy...oh, this is so beautiful. It reads like a song  
Mike
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5 posted 01-01-2000 10:20 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Thank you muchly.  Hope all you dance cards were filled last night.  *smile*
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Oh so lovely Mike!  

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
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7 posted 01-01-2000 12:57 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

...I'm Dancin'......

Echo Rhayne
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8 posted 01-01-2000 01:49 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

hey at least I am not dancing alone =o)  Tis truly great!


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Uh....Nan, I fear your toes are gonna break off if you don't slow down a bit there......ROFLMAO !    That high speed bellydancing can be quite fatal - ya know!  Parts start flying!!!  hehe

On a serious note Mike, I envy your ability of perfect rhyme & meter!  It was flawless - 8 syllables throughout!  That's why it reads like a song!  Outstanding - I love perfect meter, however I struggle sometimes to get mine to "click" as effortlessly as yours does here!  Bravo!!!  I shall work harder, indeed!  You have shown me it is possible!  hehe  


 - - - If I can just touch you once, then I feel I have accomplished what I am called to do...- - pFF


Michael
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10 posted 01-01-2000 07:18 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Magnificent piece, Mike.  You know, people can talk syllables and meter all they want but without passion, it's just plain flat no matter how well written.  But then, to see passion melded with such perfect form, truly there is nothing more beautiful.


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Wonderful, I too can hear the music  
Mike
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Thank you all for your very gracious comments.
 
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