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Broken Flight (from Nan's IT TAKES TWO challenge)
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Broken Flight (from Nan's IT TAKES TWO challenge) |
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Ron
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669Michigan, US 
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An arrow streaks from silent bow To distant cliffs on deadly search, The aim cast high, intentions low, To where a pair of eagles perch. An eagle flutters to the grass, A cry of pain upon her tongue. A broken wing she finds she has, And cannot fly with only one. Her eagle eyes cast to the skies, To mate now soaring in the wind, To cliffs and nest, eaglets denied, Harsh victim of an archer's sin. She circles round, confusion wild, Her pinions moving in the breeze. She flaps a wing in awkward trial, Her voice grieves out in strident pleas. It takes two wings to soar in flight, To play a noble eagle's role, A single wing lends no one height, It takes two halves to make us whole. ****************** I didn't want to get left out of a Challenge Resurrection, nor did I want to miss this last opportunity to wish everyone a very Happy New Year! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful! To find that missing half to make us whole is so hard! Perhaps in this next year!  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This made my heart hurt, Ron--so very beautiful and sad. Happy New Year to you. In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Happy New Year, Ron!.... and thanks for these forums which have added a much needed creative & spiritual dimension to my life in '99! This is a wonderful poem and I'm glad you brought it out again to share with us! God bless! |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
How right you are Ron, but of course you know that.  Happy New Year! Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Indeed. Michael |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful, Ron! This one took my breath away! Denise |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Majestic he appeared on wing, A-waft her soaring avian; Espying frenzied fluttering. This keen-eyed eagle looked upon Her abscind spirit waning so. From aerie perch he would alight, Lend nourishment lame pinion low And succor her return to flight. Bereft as one he'd flown before, But it takes two to touch the sun. Aloft these noble eagles soar In symbiotic unison. .....  You know I always go for the happy ending ......[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 12-31-1999).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Many of us try to soar with one wing but we just go around in circles. Excellent writing, Ron, with an equally impressive Nanny response  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Absolutely beautiful Ron...but you know, I say sometimes even a single feather's enough to fly |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Ron: So when are you taking up flying lessons?...*g* HUGS and Happy New Year Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ron, Bravo Ron and Bravo Nan. Happy new year Ron. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Lose a wing and learn to fly without, though it's just not the same. Wonderful poem Ron... HAPPY NEW YEAR!!!!!!!!! <*\\\>< Where there is faith, there is love. Where there is love, there is peace. Where there is peace, there is GOD. Where there is GOD, there is no need. Hallmark |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
*With a broken wing, she carries her dreams, man you aught to see her fly* sorry songs keep popping in my head =o) Wonderful poem Ron, very touching and beautiful! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I sent this to someone who was having trouble with their partner at work as it explains that in life it does take two to make it work sometimes, as with eagles, or anchors and sails Lovely piece Ron, as I have seen this happen all too often on the mountain here, exactly as you depicted it. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
What a coincidence! I was just going to suggest you post the NEW one that you wrote--you know, Ron--the one about the birds... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
very good. another wonderful piece. |
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