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Astraea
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since 1999-11-09
Posts 378
California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now

0 posted 1999-12-30 11:15 PM


One day I was proposed a question
That never ceases to leave my mind
My friend was curios as a kitten
Reading all the things I had written
He had seen me slaving
Over all the pens, paper and, yes, even late at night in front of a screen
He had seen the frustration
Over such little things when no words seemed to flow
And always he had been supportive, my dearest childhood friend
But now he seemed to wonder
Why I put myself to reach such a strange end

Why do I write?
Why must I put everything I think or know
Onto a paper that may never be read?
Why live through all the frowns
Of disgust or pure dislike
From people who just couldn't get the tiny inner point?
But the simple question
With such a deep meaning
Seemed so entirely easy
To answer without shame

Yes, it's work, yes, it does seem pointless
But with each little poem or story I write,
With each little quote I can give you to make a point
And with each completely piece of work finished
A little piece of my heart goes with it
Yes, it hurts, and yes, it can sometimes make you cry
For writing with pure emotion, thought or moral
You must be able to know what you talk about
And a little piece of your spirit goes with it
Because of how deep it goes into you
So, piece by piece, I write myself away
Sometimes about sadness or sometimes just to cheer
But, always, forever and as long as I know,
I will send a piece of myself along with the words

He was an understanding type, but sadly, not a writer
He asked why would I put myself through such a torture
When I never knew if anything would come of it
I laughed, dismissing the words, but the question still plagued me
Was there more of a reason?

Then all the poetry I remember and still read
Came back like a flood of good memories
This is why I write
Because when you put a little piece of yourself
It will let someone see you, just a piece
And the emotion will come back much more strongly
When you read someone else's art
And see a little piece of them
To take into yourself

So we give a little, but we get back a lot
This is why we write
To spread ourselve's around with just a little piece
And we gather up all the pieces the friends we may never meet
Into our minds
Our spirits
And our hearts


 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."


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Femme's Father
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since 1999-10-30
Posts 58
Carrollton, TX, USA
1 posted 1999-12-30 11:54 PM


I appreciate you sharing the why's of what makes us keep on ticking despite the many forces that tend to blow out our flame of expressions. Very well expressed from the depths of your fountains. I feel poetry flows from us like tossing a stick into a river and it follows the path of the river.
I step into the flow of thoughts that start
emerging from within, & if I can get into the flow the words seem to just float out
& onto the page..again nice of you to share

Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
2 posted 1999-12-31 12:16 PM


We have many similar thoughts described here and you have expressed them very ably. Very nice work indeed.
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
3 posted 1999-12-31 02:30 AM


I get similar to that myself, well done  

 At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet. (Plato)
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


devina
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since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539
Cali
4 posted 1999-12-31 05:02 AM


I feel that the frustration of writing only intensifies the satisfaction once you've gotten it right.  good poem!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

PhaerieChild
Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787
Aloha, Oregon
5 posted 1999-12-31 05:06 AM


BRAVO!!! Very good piece!! Well written and so right on. I too feel as if I give pieces of myself when I write and you've expressed it so well.

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho


Nate Dogg
Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton
6 posted 1999-12-31 01:20 PM


Brilliantly written Astraea. You're very creative too!

 Nathan

Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
7 posted 2000-01-01 08:29 AM


Wow, you described very many of my own feelings!


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~


Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
8 posted 2000-01-01 08:49 AM


Astraea,
I read this with tears flowing down my face.
I didn't know who you were but now I know.
You've written it on paper
You gave a part of yourself to me
You put into words what I couldn't express, not even on a good day, a day of inspiration, of flowing words and rhyme.
I'm so proud of this piece
You are a gifted writer indeed
Thank you for writing my heart
Love
Liz

whiskey
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since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278
Australia
9 posted 2000-01-01 08:53 AM


Astraea,
You have captured so many of the feelings I have when I need to write and I too feel as if I give parts of me in my writing , wonderful poem  

Julie

Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

10 posted 2000-01-01 12:18 PM


You have captured the essence of the writer! Giving and receiving! Well done!  

 Denise


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