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jaxjoy
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since 12-14-1999
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Texas


0 posted 12-30-1999 05:54 PM       View Profile for jaxjoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for jaxjoy



From your spark
I burst in flames
Fusion, fission, fueling
my fire.
Rage inside me
feels sharp as glass.
Fear inside me
I hope will pass.
Your heat consumes me,
leaves me barren
as a forest
you have touched,
burnt by your
enigmatic fury.
Share your water
with me.
Quench the fire
you  have built within.
Let  me smolder
through the night.
© Copyright 1999 Jacqueline Vachier - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
Posts 11105
Glen Hope, PA USA


1 posted 12-30-1999 08:07 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Has anyone ever told you you are a very talented poet? If not, I'm telling you now. This is fantastic!!!
Femme's Father
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since 10-30-1999
Posts 68
Carrollton, TX, USA


2 posted 12-30-1999 08:34 PM       View Profile for Femme's Father   Email Femme's Father   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Femme's Father

Each time I read this it keeps gettin' better
and I finally found the rhythm and started seeing the picture your words were painting..
very well written. I like the way you put your feelings into subtle parables..keep up the good work...james david
jaxjoy
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Texas


3 posted 12-30-1999 10:09 PM       View Profile for jaxjoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jaxjoy

Thank you so much.  I am so happy to hear that you enjoy my writing.  I like the supportive environment here at passions!!
whiskey
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4 posted 12-30-1999 10:13 PM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

This is wonderful
Echo Rhayne
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5 posted 01-01-2000 06:58 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

I am with hoot on this one, you are a talented poet...great poem!


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~

Denise
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6 posted 01-01-2000 12:44 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Ditto! Excellent poem!

 Denise

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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since 08-26-99
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7 posted 01-01-2000 02:16 PM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

Vivid wording, painting a sharply emotional picture - after several readings, I'm still coming up with new possible scenarios; the main one being pleasurably obvious.  I really enjoy this one!  Well done.
jaxjoy
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Posts 118
Texas


8 posted 01-01-2000 07:18 PM       View Profile for jaxjoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jaxjoy

I appreciate your comments.  Thank you all very much.
mama duck
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since 12-31-1999
Posts 43
Northern California


9 posted 01-01-2000 07:23 PM       View Profile for mama duck   Email mama duck   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mama duck

Very nice--if it was on paper it might be too hot to touch. I enjoyed it a lot.
Chris
Michael
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10 posted 01-01-2000 07:54 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Great poem here.  Love the symbolism you use.  This poem seems to urge me to ask for more somehow....


Michael
devina
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11 posted 01-01-2000 08:02 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Very deep words my friend, keep em comin!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
 
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