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Snuffles... (A Spenserian Sonnet)

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Nan
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0 posted 12-29-1999 07:15 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I'm reeeally sick! I hab an awfoo code -
I don' feel good doe madder what I do.
I deed tsum soup and a stupfed bear to hode.
Oh doe.. Here cubs a great bid sneedze... ah-CHOO!

I'm reeeally sick! I'm stnupfly and I'm blue
I deed a great bid box ob titsues, pleadze -
Here cubs another, AH-ah-AH-ah-CHOO!!
I'b sorry folks, I din'nt mean to sneedze.

But I can'd breedthe - I cough an' then I wheedze.
Rebembering what mommy always said,
"Stay cubbered and drindk tea so you don' freedze."
If you'd escuze me pleadze, I'm goind back to bed.

Who-ebber gabe dis awfoo code to me.
Pleadze take it back - Now where idz my blankey???
© Copyright 1999 Nancy Ness - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 12-29-1999 08:06 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Awwwww.....I hope you feel better real soon, Nan. Sounds like maybe a touch of the flu. It's going around here too. A lousey way to spend your winter break. Great sonnet! Now get back to bed! And God bless you!

 Denise


Mike
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2 posted 12-29-1999 08:37 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

The scary part is, this is the first one of your poems I can understand... *smile*  
loved it...
WhtDove
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3 posted 12-29-1999 09:50 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Bless you Nan!  And I hope you're feeling better real soon!  I have to really laugh at how you did this though...so true to life...keep that tissue close and use some cocoa butter on the nose to keep it from hurting!!!

 <*\\\><
Where there is faith,
there is love.
Where there is love,
there is peace.
Where there is peace,
there is GOD.
Where there is GOD,
there is no need.

Hallmark


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4 posted 12-29-1999 10:15 PM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

i do believe in sniffluffagas save us sniffliffagas save us!!
Andrew Scott
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5 posted 12-29-1999 10:33 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Ya say ya got the cold
And you're full of sneezes
You're coughin' and sputtrin'
Your breath comes in wheezes!

Well step forward young lady
Now don't be shy
I've got the cure for what ails ya
And that ain't no lie!

See here the bug you got
It's a brand new strain
Not very leathal
Unless you got an AI brain

They call it the Y2K
And there's only one remedy
Stock up on D-cells
And go straight to February

... and with that, the Doctor has left the building!  Hope you get to feeling better... my wife has been sick these past four days and she's just haten life right now.
Nan
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6 posted 12-29-1999 11:44 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

You guys are all bad influences on me... I write this wonderful sonnet because I'm too sick to do the sestina that I should be working on... I try to go back to bed so I'll feel better.... and you all keep me up... What's wrong with this picture??? It's all Passionate Poets' fault....
Andrew Scott
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7 posted 12-30-1999 12:23 AM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Yep! We take full responsibility... even though it's really all Toerags fault!  
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8 posted 12-30-1999 12:34 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Ooh Nan..   You aren't alone here..I'm sick too...I think I might have the flu....ick!  I hope you and everyone else who's sick here at passions gets well soon!  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha


Michael
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9 posted 12-30-1999 01:08 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Jeeze - talk about "a play on words".  Indeed, I hope this ain't contagious...LOL
Good job.


Michael
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10 posted 12-30-1999 01:53 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Laughing at Mikes reply...I was going to say something similar myself. This is the first of your poems, I think, that I haven't had to get a dictionary out to look up at least one of the word...LOL...now that's bad. But it seems we're speaking the same language right now  
Hope you get to feeling better soon my friend...you are in my thoughts and prayers.
Hugs  
devina
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11 posted 12-30-1999 02:55 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Must say Nan, that I sound as congested as you do, yet I'm guiltily sitting at my computer, typing away.  Just get yourself a few boxes of kleenex for the top of your computer hun, Hope you're better soon!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Echo Rhayne
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12 posted 12-30-1999 07:22 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

sobbing uncontrolably*  Im sorry Nan *sniff*  I didn't mean to get you sick =o(  I hope you feel better soon!!  you can give it right back to me if you woudl like, I wont mind!  Sorry!!  Great poem though!


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~

Seymour Tabin
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13 posted 12-30-1999 12:03 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Dear Nan,
Snuf is esnuf already.
Get back into bed
And continue with tea.
If that doesn't work,
Get in touch with me.
Love ya Sy.
PS. the poem was wonderful.
RSEvans
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14 posted 12-30-1999 12:47 PM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

I've seen your sestina so you must feel better.  Keep on writing and using that tissue, Nan.  
RSEvans
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15 posted 12-30-1999 12:48 PM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

ack..scratch that...feel better soon so we CAN see that sestina...LOL though this is funny and I'm with Mike on understanding it.
Marilyn
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16 posted 12-30-1999 12:59 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Gee Nan...we had better get you better so that the Dictionaries don't get dusty! lol.
Sending you some TLC and some homemade chicken soup. Get better soon.

Nate Dogg
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18 posted 12-30-1999 01:27 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Wow, Nan! I haven't read much of your poems but, this poem alone shows that you're among the best poets on this board. Brillant poem!!
Your lovely poem has inspired to write a sonnet.
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19 posted 12-30-1999 01:56 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Well, Snuffly. . . I see that the medication has finally gotten to you!  

Hope that you're feeling all better veddy soon!!



 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

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20 posted 12-30-1999 09:55 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

I know the feeling Miss Nanners...I've got one too.  In tribute, here's a limerick.

Croup

Husky throat contradicts me
Illness I feel quite acutely
I cough and I sneeze
When I sleep I do wheeze
This body would like to be rid me


Alicat  



 As I sit here dimly thinking
Watching modem lights a-blinking
Churning out poetic hash.
Lord, in all Your piety,
Help me keep my sanity:
Please don't let the modem crash! --Alicat


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21 posted 12-30-1999 11:29 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Poor NANNER! At least your malady has not dulled either your wit or writing ability. This one's a cutie  
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22 posted 12-31-1999 10:27 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Nan: Hope you're feeling better and thanks for the gift of laughter...

HUSG

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.

doreen peri
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23 posted 12-31-1999 12:23 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

Great one, Nan! LOL.... loved it!!! Hope you're feeling better!

stay well in 2000... happy New Year


love, doreen
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24 posted 12-31-1999 11:35 PM       View Profile for maedavid   Email maedavid   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for maedavid

May the New Year bring you health and love.
Great poem.  Very entertaining.  Sounds just like me when I get sick.  I like to have my little soft fuzzy bear to hold on to also.

 The only way to know Love, is to Know God.
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25 posted 04-29-2004 03:19 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

I love how you always find a way to make light of your formatting... it just goes to show that some formats are universally applicable, and can bring something to any sort of poem, be it a love sonnet or a poem about having a cold...

I've never read a humourous Spenserian sonnet before now... thanks for the experience.

Brian

"God becomes as we are that we may be as he is."  ~William Blake

 
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