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How She Breaks

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jaxjoy
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0 posted 12-29-1999 03:43 PM       View Profile for jaxjoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for jaxjoy



How she breaks
as she waits...
for the world
to gather round
and catch the demise
of the poor foolish girl.

She was a thief
to your comfort
or
an answer
to your prayers
but
always
kept in darkness.

Her faith
began to falter.
Thus exposing you.
You need not disrobe
to be naked.
Only honest.

The dawn star
burns bright
and clears
the evening mist.
Her vision restores.
What she first
deemed glory
is only weakness.
A sadistic weakling,
Afraid.

Her head hangs low
as she finds
her angel
never had wings.
It was she
all along
who had
the gift of flight.


© Copyright 1999 Jacqueline Vachier - All Rights Reserved
Poet deVine
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1 posted 12-29-1999 04:00 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Wonderful free verse! I love it!  
Echo Rhayne
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2 posted 12-30-1999 03:26 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

I enjoyed this greatly!

 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~

hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 12-30-1999 04:40 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Applauding!!! Wonderful!!! Oh, can I ever relate to this one. You expressed yourself very clearly and this flows so well. Great job, I wouldn't change a thing in it  

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 12-30-1999).]
TomS
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4 posted 12-30-1999 10:03 AM       View Profile for TomS   Email TomS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TomS

Very powerful and intriguing.  Such a mystery.
whiskey
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5 posted 12-30-1999 10:07 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

Very well done! I like this alot, wonderful words  
Betty Gravitt
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6 posted 12-30-1999 10:23 AM       View Profile for Betty Gravitt   Email Betty Gravitt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Betty Gravitt

Beautiful. I like this very much.

 B Gravitt


jaxjoy
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7 posted 12-30-1999 03:15 PM       View Profile for jaxjoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jaxjoy

I am glad you enjoyed this piece.  Thank you all for sharing.
caroline
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8 posted 12-30-1999 04:06 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Jax this is absolute perfection!  I really love this...keep that posting going, girl  
I'm enjoying your writing!


 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


Tamera
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9 posted 12-30-1999 05:57 PM       View Profile for Tamera   Email Tamera   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tamera

I enjoyed this so much! So true!  
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10 posted 12-30-1999 08:25 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

JaxJoy -
Oh, how I like this ...
what a thought ...
what truth:

'You need not disrobe
to be naked.
Only honest.'

WONDERFUL !  WONDERFUL !
~*Marge*~


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Martie
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11 posted 12-30-1999 08:31 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

What a wonderful and powerful poem.  I liked those same lines that Marge did. Hope to read more of your poems.

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
jaxjoy
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12 posted 12-30-1999 10:22 PM       View Profile for jaxjoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jaxjoy

Thanks again  
 
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