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highwayman
Junior Member
since 1999-12-29
Posts 42
Cookeville, Tennessee, usa

0 posted 1999-12-29 01:16 PM


,Oh my goodness
Oh me oh my,
I have this feeling ,
That I'm going tho die.
I don't really know,
The reason why,
It comes through my ears,
My nose, and eyes.
It hurts my head,
And hurts my heart,
It hurts all over,
Every time I start.
It's of that emotion,
The one called love,
Thats the bad thing,
That I speak of.
The reason that,
I think I'll die,
Is becouse I lack it,
And I don't know why.
It's hard to say,
Just when it left me,
I can't point it out,
I can't even see.
I think she took it,
On that day,
When shee left my side,
And went away.                    

© Copyright 1999 Mike - All Rights Reserved
Tamera
Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 121

1 posted 1999-12-29 01:45 PM


sad...no one can take your love though, it is inside of you..it shows through your words..
whiskey
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Senior Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278
Australia
2 posted 1999-12-29 07:17 PM


Very sad poem, But love you have I know ,
Good work  

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
3 posted 1999-12-29 08:04 PM


"And the highwayman comes riding up to the old inn door"  couldn't resist that with the song I love and all.
That particular love may be gone, by the light of your love is always within, just waiting to shine again.  Never fear, it is still there, it may just be a bit wounded at present  

 At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet. (Plato)
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Echo Rhayne
Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
4 posted 1999-12-30 04:15 AM


Sad, but you captured your emotions greatly!


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~


hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
5 posted 1999-12-30 05:21 AM


Very sad, but know the feeling  
Meadowmuse
Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

6 posted 1999-12-30 11:37 PM


Cleverly crafted, this piece, and the disjointed ending is perfect.
Astraea
Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378
California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now
7 posted 1999-12-30 11:47 PM


Very lovely, if sad.

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."


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