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Michael
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0 posted 1999-12-29 05:43 AM


TRUE BEAUTY

True beauty within, some will never see
The duty of love is not cause for strife.
Your unappeased flesh spawns the misery,
Yet, Beauty has laid no curse on your life.

The duty of love is not cause for strife,
For Honor rises to heights all her own.
Yet, Beauty has laid no curse on your life,
Except blinding lust and a jealous bone.

For honor rises to heights all her own,
Blessed be any who find strength in God.
Except blinding lust and a jealous bone,
What else has your friendship offered but fraud.

Blessed be any who find strength in God,
For he who knows love shall stand above all.
What else has your friendship offered but fraud,
The very venom by which you now crawl.

For He who knows love shall stand above all,
For He who knows all shall stand on the truth.
The very venom by which you now crawl,
In sanctifying a curse held from youth.

For He who knows all shall stand on the truth.
Your unappeased flesh spawns the misery.
In sanctifying a curse held from youth,
True beauty within, some will never see.




 It's the little things you take for granted,
That'll mean the most to you when they're gone.




© Copyright 1999 Michael Anderson - All Rights Reserved
Severn
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1 posted 1999-12-29 05:50 AM


What is this form called Michael?

Wow - this is excellent - and I think very true.
You have written such intricate lines and it requires multiple readings!

'For he who knows love shall stand above all'...great job indeed...

  K< !signature-->

 ...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara

[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 12-29-1999).]

Dark Angel
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2 posted 1999-12-29 06:01 AM


True Beauty indeed, loved it Michael  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



Michael
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3 posted 1999-12-29 07:07 AM


Severn, this form of verse is called a pantoum.  Scott actually introduced me to this type of poetry some time back.  In fact, this poem is a direct response to one of Scott's pantoums in Dark, "Cathartic Invective".  Glad you enjoyed it, you too Dark Angel.

Michael

Christopher
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4 posted 1999-12-29 07:30 AM


True beauty... well done on the poem Mr. Mike!
LOL, and well done on the form!

caroline
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5 posted 1999-12-29 09:26 AM


Exquisite work, Michael. Awesome.

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain



Poet deVine
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6 posted 1999-12-29 04:05 PM


Impressive! Very well done...and I love the message!  

Nan
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7 posted 1999-12-29 09:08 PM


Nice one, my friend.... and where were you during the Pantoum Workshop????

Michael
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8 posted 1999-12-30 01:01 AM


Did I actually get the feet right, Nan?  I hate having to look up words, and you know I can't tell just by sounding them out...that's why I hid during workshop.  LOL

Glad you enjoyed anyway, you too Chris, Caroline and PdV.

Michael

[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 12-30-1999).]

whiskey
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9 posted 1999-12-30 01:27 AM


Truley Wonderful , Your work amazes me

poetFemmeFatale
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10 posted 1999-12-31 12:42 PM


Fabulous read, and what a powerful statement you made here!  Bravo!  I had read this a couple of times already, and somehow failed to reply!  So here I am, your princess in waiting, rescueing it from pg. 7 !!  LOL   Tis a bold and powerful statement indeed!!!   Thank you - you are my hero...
Isis
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11 posted 1999-12-31 12:45 PM


True beauty indeed, I must add though the writer must have true beauty inside to write something this lovely  
Glad you pulled it back from page 7 PFF  

 At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet. (Plato)
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


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