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adam
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since 1999-12-28
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0 posted 1999-12-29 02:47 AM




when i was young, a fever gave rise.

it changed forever, a young boy's
eyes.

when i looked in my window, i began to see.

the truths of this, life manifest to me.

as i watched the spiders play,

in there ruthless, wicked way.

a game they never win,

and grow stronger from their sin.

predator some may be but no-longer,living free.

free from the tangled web,that made them,

should it crumble, would enslave them.

                by
      Adam Clarke Roberts


 

© Copyright 1999 Adam Clarke Roberts - All Rights Reserved
Kevin Taylor
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since 1999-12-23
Posts 185
near Vancouver, BC, Canada
1 posted 1999-12-29 02:54 AM


Damn! Dark and thoughtful.
I was drawn through it.

 Kevin

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

2 posted 1999-12-29 03:15 AM


This piece captured me with its first two lines, actually, then kept me there. Quite strong, this sinister appeal.
Georgia
Junior Member
since 1999-12-22
Posts 32

3 posted 1999-12-29 08:40 AM


i have to tell you this is a neat concept on life...goes to show if you are not careful with what you do in life..like the spider..you can be caught in your own web! Am i right?
Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
4 posted 1999-12-30 02:45 AM


Deep, thought provoking, exquisite!  


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~


hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
5 posted 1999-12-30 04:53 AM


Very deep, very intriguing, I like your style, rest assured, I will be looking for more from you.
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