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Russian Roulette

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Willem
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0 posted 12-28-1999 09:03 PM       View Profile for Willem   Email Willem   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Willem

RUSSIAN ROULETTE

She was so young and beautiful, so innocent,
so full of joy and laughter
and childish faith,
my best friends' only daughter...

Some friends of hers once got themselves
into a mess, and all she wanted was
to help them, show them a better way,
my best friends' only daughter.

And so, one summer night, she called
to ask them over for tea and talks,
in her apartment at the campus,
my best friends' only daughter.

And talk they did, about their doubts and pains,
their fading hopes and dying faith...
She told them of Christ's healing love,
my best friends' only daughter...

When one girl asked, "Will God protect me always
from every deadly danger, wherever I may be?"
She answered, "Yes, just pray for it",
my best friends' only daughter.

But suddenly one boy pulled out a gun and said,
"There's just one single round in here..."
And then he spun the drum. "You're crazy!", said
my best friend's only daughter.

"Oh, no!", he said, "here is your chance to prove
that God will really protect you if you ask."
He offered her the gun, and foolishly she took it,
my best friends' only daughter.

"Now put it to your head and pull that trigger,
to prove your faith in God's protecting power."
She cried, she prayed, then pulled. And died.
My best friends' only daughter...

She and her friends paid dearly, just to learn
this bitter lesson:  never challenge God.
They lost a friend, she lost her life,
my best friends lost their only daughter...


by Willem



  




[This message has been edited by Willem (edited 12-28-1999).]
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Georgia
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1 posted 12-28-1999 10:08 PM       View Profile for Georgia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Georgia

wow..i felt that one from far away..powerful message..got your point willem...really did..
Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 12-28-1999 10:38 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Glad you found #5, Willem, Powerful and sad, this poem
Liz
Denise
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3 posted 12-28-1999 10:42 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Heartbreaking. Such a tragedy. Well written.

 Denise


Astraea
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4 posted 12-28-1999 10:44 PM       View Profile for Astraea   Email Astraea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Astraea

Lovely.

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

Balladeer
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5 posted 12-28-1999 11:52 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

This one hits hard, willem. Good work here.
Tamera
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6 posted 12-29-1999 12:18 AM       View Profile for Tamera   Email Tamera   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tamera

A tragedy, you caught my attention, and I felt it as though it was my own...powerful.
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7 posted 12-29-1999 12:37 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

I heard the shot ring out ...
I cried with them,
your best friends ...
for the loss of thier only daughter.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Echo Rhayne
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8 posted 12-29-1999 01:58 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

WoW!!!  How terrible.  You show many wonderful points here, you show how dangerous R.R is and how you shant challenge God.  Very deep powerful poem here, but your expressed yourself greatly!


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~

Paul Hoekman
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9 posted 12-30-1999 12:12 AM       View Profile for Paul Hoekman   Email Paul Hoekman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Paul Hoekman's Home Page   View IP for Paul Hoekman

  Willem, I feel this one from so many places ,I have 3 daughters and my brother died in a car crash 15 years ago and felt in some way he took a bullet for me.
  I appreciate your other input as well.
           Thanks,Paul
Songbird
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10 posted 12-30-1999 12:37 AM       View Profile for Songbird   Email Songbird   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Songbird's Home Page   View IP for Songbird

How very shocking. Life is precious, and gambleing with it, foolishly as this poem depicts, is a fatal lesson to learn. My heart goes out to the family and to the young man who tested her faith. He certainly is going to have much to deal with.
Alwye
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11 posted 12-30-1999 12:39 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

This one hit really hard...what a powerful work.  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha


hoot_owl_rn
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12 posted 12-30-1999 01:41 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

I feared the end of this before I even opened the poem. Very tragic story, but you've told it well
Willem
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13 posted 01-21-2000 03:23 PM       View Profile for Willem   Email Willem   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Willem

To all those dear friends who were kind enough to evaluate this poem for me, I deeply appreciate all you said about it.
Basically, this is a story of something that really happened in my hometown long ago, but I changed names and locations and some of the circumstances to protect the privacy of all involved, and I hope I really succeeded in that, while keeping the message intact.

Willem
One Who Understands
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14 posted 01-21-2000 04:11 PM       View Profile for One Who Understands   Email One Who Understands   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for One Who Understands

Such a valuble piece of advice...a very powerful way to express it.

Great work  

[This message has been edited by One Who Understands (edited 01-21-2000).]
 
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