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Lay Still This Night
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Lay Still This Night |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
Lay still this night when the stars sing quietly while the watchdog sleeps as the blanket of night settles The pit I've fallen endless To fight, eternally helpless my grip loosens my will fades my heart slows O why can't you let me lie still this night? With hunger in your eyes masked with clouds With open arms to forgive silent to not condemn With a gentle smile on your lips the cool winds soften O let me lie still this night! Let your ghost rest once Let my soul go on Let go of me Why must you haunt me so? Creeping closer, you reach out to hold, help to comfort, soothe to plead, rest to cry, forgive I scream silently Begging you with tears I collapse in fear Pleading with sobs I break from a shell Blocking memories in walls I keep my sanity Shivering, shuddering, quaking you touch my heart with forgiving confidence Broken, crying, waking you hold me close gentle, solid tenderness Alone, lost, empty, you whisper in my ear an angel's echo And when I rock, holding myself hating myself wishing everything would fade My words unlock what you mean to assume "Let me lie still this night! Let all the pain leave me empty, empty from all given and gotten, let me suffer alone! "Let me lie still this night, without screaming memories to pain. Let the needles of my own pierce, let your haunting leave me be!" You smiled and I feel darkness close over me ever more Tears were in your eyes The arms tightened Your words shook "Let this be the night you lie let my words carry you thus and my haunting kill you no more: I forgive you "Let your heart grow warm again let the guilt lift placed by your own hands and so let my words be a sun: I forgive you "Let the tears stop flowing let your eyes dry now and so let my light guide: I forgive you" You left; I cried deeper still than before You had so much more to give! I took it all it away You had so much more to say I stole your breath You had so much more to live I killed you Your hand's touch burned the night you lay still The next dawn silent when your breath ceased And with your last you wrote with shakes Poetry I couldn't forget in death my lock my key my death my life Saying with all the friends in the world In one burst of goodness Your last was to me in pen: I forgive you O let me lay still this night when no memories haunt me so When I could have saved you and did not fight and do such With your goodness and feeling innocence lost I took from a world with ignorance turning away taking back ignoring you For that I pay still more to give until I die But the years have taken I have but one wish selfish Let me lie still this night "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
WoW, this is great! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I agree! Great poem! Denise |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Great poem! Very unique. Much enjoyed!  In flames I shall not be consumed, but reborn. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I'm speechless!, and that's unusual. This is well written, captivating, different, to be sure. I enjoyed reading it, Liz |
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Tamera Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 121 |
Wow! Very different, very beautiful, very captivating...I feel a tear...oh no! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Very unique in style , interesting read |
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Richard Junior Member
since 1999-12-27
Posts 35California |
Interesting and thought provoking. Well done indeed. |
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TomS Junior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 32 |
Wow. This is the deepest thing I ever read. |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Moving , A tear in my eye , wonderful poem |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Oh what a story this tells! "Lay still this night" repeating, beseeching, whether dreaming or lifetold, this is beautiful, and thank you for the gifting. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
What a wonderful story teller you are At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet. (Plato) ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
I agree with everyone else, great, great, great poem! You're very gifted. Nathan |
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mama duck Junior Member
since 1999-12-31
Posts 41Northern California |
This poem left me breathless and feeling to the core the pain and hopelessness you expressed. Wrenchingly, tearfully, beautiful. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mamma Duck said so well the way that I felt as I read this--disturbing, harsh, painful and very real. In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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jaxjoy Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 112Texas |
Full of sorrow and restlessness. Very emotional journey. "Lay still this night" those words echo in my head. Many a night I have felt this way. |
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