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Lay Still This Night

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Astraea
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0 posted 12-28-1999 09:05 PM       View Profile for Astraea   Email Astraea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Astraea

Lay still this night
        when the stars sing quietly
        while the watchdog sleeps
        as the blanket of night settles
The pit I've fallen endless
To fight, eternally helpless
        my grip loosens
        my will fades
        my heart slows
O why can't you let me lie still this night?

With hunger in your eyes
masked with clouds
With open arms to forgive
silent to not condemn
With a gentle smile on your lips
the cool winds soften
O let me lie still this night!
        Let your ghost rest once
        Let my soul go on
        Let go of me
Why must you haunt me so?

Creeping closer, you reach out
        to hold, help
        to comfort, soothe
        to plead, rest
        to cry, forgive

I scream silently

Begging you with tears
        I collapse in fear
Pleading with sobs
        I break from a shell
Blocking memories in walls
        I keep my sanity
Shivering, shuddering, quaking
        you touch my heart
        with forgiving confidence
Broken, crying, waking
        you hold me close
        gentle, solid tenderness
Alone, lost, empty,
        you whisper in my ear
        an angel's echo
And when I rock, holding myself
        hating myself
        wishing everything would fade
My words unlock what you mean to assume

"Let me lie still this night!
Let all the pain leave me empty,
empty from all given and gotten,
let me suffer alone!

"Let me lie still this night,
without screaming memories to pain.
Let the needles of my own pierce,
let your haunting leave me be!"

You smiled and I feel darkness close over me ever more
        Tears were in your eyes
        The arms tightened
Your words shook

"Let this be the night you lie
let my words carry you thus
and my haunting kill you no more:
I forgive you

"Let your heart grow warm again
let the guilt lift placed by your own hands
and so let my words be a sun:
I forgive you

"Let the tears stop flowing
let your eyes dry now
and so let my light guide:
I forgive you"

You left; I cried deeper still than before
You had so much more to give!
        I took it all it away
You had so much more to say
        I stole your breath
You had so much more to live
        I killed you

Your hand's touch burned
        the night you lay still
The next dawn silent
        when your breath ceased
And with your last
        you wrote with shakes
Poetry I couldn't forget in death
        my lock
        my key
        my death
        my life
Saying with all the friends in the world
        In one burst of goodness
Your last was to me in pen: I forgive you

O let me lay still this night
        when no memories haunt me so
When I could have saved you
        and did not fight and do such
With your goodness and feeling
        innocence lost
I took from a world with ignorance
        turning away
        taking back
        ignoring you
For that I pay still
        more to give until I die
But the years have taken
        I have but one wish
        selfish
Let me lie still this night



 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

© Copyright 1999 Tiffany - All Rights Reserved
Echo Rhayne
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1 posted 12-28-1999 09:10 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

WoW, this is great!


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~

Denise
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2 posted 12-28-1999 09:19 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I agree! Great poem!

 Denise


Dusk Treader
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3 posted 12-28-1999 10:38 PM       View Profile for Dusk Treader   Email Dusk Treader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dusk Treader

Great poem! Very unique.  Much enjoyed!  

 In flames I shall not be consumed, but reborn.

Elizabeth Santos
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since 11-08-1999
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4 posted 12-28-1999 10:43 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

I'm speechless!, and that's unusual. This is well written, captivating, different, to be sure. I enjoyed reading it,
Liz
Tamera
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5 posted 12-29-1999 12:46 PM       View Profile for Tamera   Email Tamera   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tamera

Wow! Very different, very beautiful, very captivating...I feel a tear...oh no!  
hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
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6 posted 12-29-1999 12:53 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Very unique in style , interesting read  
Richard
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7 posted 12-29-1999 01:12 PM       View Profile for Richard   Email Richard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Richard

Interesting and thought provoking. Well done indeed.
TomS
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8 posted 12-30-1999 10:17 AM       View Profile for TomS   Email TomS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TomS

Wow.  This is the deepest thing I ever read.
whiskey
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9 posted 12-30-1999 10:30 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

Moving , A tear in my eye , wonderful poem  
Meadowmuse
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10 posted 12-31-1999 12:00 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Oh what a story this tells!

"Lay still this night"  repeating, beseeching, whether dreaming or lifetold, this is beautiful, and thank you for the gifting.
Isis
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11 posted 12-31-1999 02:32 AM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

What a wonderful story teller you are  

 At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet. (Plato)
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

Nate Dogg
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12 posted 12-31-1999 01:26 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

I agree with everyone else, great, great, great poem! You're very gifted.

 Nathan
mama duck
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13 posted 01-01-2000 07:16 PM       View Profile for mama duck   Email mama duck   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mama duck

This poem left me breathless and feeling to the core the pain and hopelessness you expressed. Wrenchingly, tearfully, beautiful.
Martie
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14 posted 01-01-2000 07:29 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Mamma Duck said so well the way that I felt as I read this--disturbing, harsh, painful and very real.

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
jaxjoy
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since 12-14-1999
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16 posted 01-01-2000 08:47 PM       View Profile for jaxjoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jaxjoy

Full of sorrow and restlessness.  Very emotional journey.  "Lay still this night"  those words echo in my head.  Many a night I have felt this way.
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