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0 posted 12-28-1999 08:04 PM       View Profile for Astraea   Email Astraea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Astraea

Sweet, sweet!
O cherishable song of sirens
Listen how they sing, they chant, they inspire!
Veritable wine it is, that draws me closer
I cannot fight it
Forgetting, forgiving, knowing nothing but sweetness
I want it to never end
With gold and diamond chains
Locking us away
It is our own feet bringing us to this forsaken place

Listen, listen!
O beautiful ringing of the bells I imagine
Hear how you can hear your future ringing!
Can you hear it?
Just one step closer and you'll be there!
For you know that there is no other road to take
Forget your past, forget your woes, forget everything but the sweetness
I feel the strange sort of peace settling
The smith building, creating, forming
Our own hearts tied to a thing
We thought we wanted, but was always too far

Hurry, hurry!
O the swiftness of quicksilver
See it speed away from you like a chased rabbit!
Catch it before it escapes, catch it before starvation reaches
Watch as the sweetness begins to dribble away
Eating at you like a vulture
And here is your chance to live again!
No past to stand, a future so hazy to see clearly
Your present is only filled with a dullness
Sweetness has your oath of fealty
So race like the wind to catch it before darkness descends!

Live, live!
Can't you see the siren's song pulling you to deep waters?
Fight, fight!
Can't you hear the bell's ringing fade away?
Think, think!
Is there anything else worth more than momentary sweetness?

I have no idea what I speak of in this terrible poem.  I only know that I saw this quote:  "Temptation hath a music for all ears." and that's was the end of the beginning for this particular subject.

[who officially thinks that this is her worst poem yet]

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1 posted 12-28-1999 08:16 PM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

I liked it  
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2 posted 12-28-1999 08:24 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

(laughing at you being so hard on yourself!)  
I happen to like it alot!  I really liked the mechanics of the thing!  Very interesting indeed - how you kept the format the same...I'm sure there's a name, or something for that...although I'm not familiar with the details ..I should ask Nan...she knows everything!  hehe Anyway, I'm glad you shared!  It's nice to see variety in here from time to time!  
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3 posted 12-28-1999 08:51 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

I enjoyed this one too!  

 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~

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