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The Fishers' Sea

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Kevin Taylor
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0 posted 12-28-1999 04:02 PM       View Profile for Kevin Taylor   Email Kevin Taylor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Kevin Taylor's Home Page   View IP for Kevin Taylor


Shhhh...

-I-

The morning woke with village lights
As yet the dawn was still to be
With oar on gunwale sounding roll
The village fishers flocked to sea

And as the sun stretched from the night
As village folk meet every day
The women and the elders worked
Between their chores the children played

Within the branches of an elm
Whose rigging - child and fairy realm
There sortied fleets of castle-ships
With pirate-kings at every helm

Their bravest took the highest perch
First mate to all that sailed below
There, looking out, his eyes grew wide
Ahoy! he cried, The sea! A boat!

The women gathered young ones near
The elders looked to echo's way
There, in the sunlight on the sea
Beyond the fairy elm, she lay

-II-

The ship was golden. Rigging, foreign
Ensign of an opal hue
That split the sun and splashed her rays
Across a shifting sea of blue

Yet not one soul was seen upon her
Not one soul did venture there
The village held it's breath in beauty
Not a whisper creased the air

Morning sun had waned to crescent
Stars were waxed to guide the way
Still the ship swam still and silent
Still the village morning lay

-III-

And as the sun drew from its sliver
Silver skirted seas of slate
That day that God had twice divided
Saw her shadowed sun too late

Over water - wind and fury
Anchored under sky of stone
The village held its breath in fear
The sea might wash their fishers home

Lightning flashed across the heavens
Thunder sounded ever near
The women and the children searched for
Prayers Almighty God might hear

Yet never was there ever answer
From that foreign flag that flew
Undefended under heaven's
Purling skies of slate and blue

-IV-

As final trace of evening sky
On opal-embered seas was cast
With rigging lit by Elmo's choirs
She left the sea alone at last

-V-

Now, sleepy village children sleep
And dream of fishers' dawn to be
Of slip and shingle sounding surf
Of elms along an opal sea...

Shhhh...

  



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Nan
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1 posted 12-28-1999 05:17 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Kevin, this is a wonderful poem... It tells a wonderful story, and it's technically quite finely crafted. You've woven your tale in perfect iambic tetrameter, using some great imagery... My first perusal finds some exceptional use of personification, alliteration, metaphor..... going back for more now.... Keep 'em coming.. all righty???   
Echo Rhayne
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2 posted 12-28-1999 05:58 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

*whispering* This is wonderful, quite beautiful!

 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 12-28-1999 06:05 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Kevintaylor,
You have an epoch poem here. Enjoyed the read very much, keep them comming.
Astraea
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4 posted 12-28-1999 06:12 PM       View Profile for Astraea   Email Astraea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Astraea

I agree with everyone else.  I thought it was a lovely poem.

~Astraea

"Charms strike the sight but merit wins the soul."  



 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

caroline
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5 posted 12-28-1999 06:20 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

This is indeed an outstanding work...the picture you paint with your words is absolutely beautiful!  I envy your form and flow here, too    This gets a standing ovation here!

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


Denise
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6 posted 12-28-1999 09:35 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

A masterpiece! Truly wonderful! Yes, do keep them coming!

 Denise


Martie
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7 posted 12-28-1999 09:40 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

This is indeed excellent in every way.  I look forward to reading more of your poems.

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 12-28-1999 09:48 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

A Masterpiece!!! Wonderfully done Kevin, you should be proud of this one  
Meadowmuse
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What a gifting this was! Your elements of nature and mysteries of sea provided me a fleeting few moments' journey to this land of sleepy, playful children and their fae~filled castle ships. Your descriptions of the sky were breathtaking, your air of ill omen, apparent. Thank you for this treasure!
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11 posted 12-29-1999 07:28 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Kevin -

Such a beautiful array of verse.

~Opalescent~ imagery that captured me
in it's waves.

How very, very lovely.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Paul Hoekman
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12 posted 12-30-1999 12:40 AM       View Profile for Paul Hoekman   Email Paul Hoekman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Paul Hoekman's Home Page   View IP for Paul Hoekman

  Being a long time sailor I found myself on the inside of this poem looking out and enjoying the view.
                 Thanks,      
                       Paul
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