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The voyage

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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 12-28-1999 01:46 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seymour Tabin


             The voyage

The past has built a ship for us
And it billows o'er the sea.
Its sails are full of memory gusts
And dreams of yet to be.

Through storms and fog and nights of doubt,
This vessel has endured.
And never will it come about,
These karma's are secured.

Two souls in love steer its course,
Its end is yet to come.
It goes beyond the albatross,
To weld two souls as one.
© Copyright 1999 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
poetFemmeFatale
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1 posted 12-28-1999 01:54 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

"It's sails are full of memory gusts...."   Exquisitely written sir!  All 3 stanzas are magical, especially touched my soul....as I feel I am too, on a voyage. Thank you for sharing such a wonderfully nautical piece....***curtsies and clapping

 - - - If I can just touch you once, then I feel I have accomplished what I am called to do...- - pFF


Eloise
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2 posted 12-28-1999 02:00 PM       View Profile for Eloise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Eloise

What a great poem.  I enjoyed this one very much.
Meadowmuse
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Enjoyed the seafaring references you've employed here. This puts me somewhat in the mind of the traditional, "The Water is Wide." I enjoy the concept of Life's ocean being humbly navigated within the vessel of one's own love. You've conveyed this splendidly.
Honeybee
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4 posted 12-28-1999 03:18 PM       View Profile for Honeybee   Email Honeybee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Honeybee



   Seymour Tabin:

    Wow, what a beautifully written poem, it took my breath away.  Usually I am not fond of poems like this, but, this one is just perfect and flows so well.  Your use of imagery shines, your words are magical.
I love this poem!!  The first verse sets the tone very well.  

My favourite lines:

"and it bollows o'er the sea.
it's sails are full of memory gusts"

"it goes beyond the albatross.
to weld two souls as one."

This is the first poem that I had ever read by you, and I must say I am very impressed.  I look forward to more poetry by you.


I have poems in critical analysis and in dark passions, feel free to reply to my poems. Thanks!


  * Melissa Honeybee *
Nan
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... but then there's me... the perennial lover of poetry about the sea....Love it, Sy...
Echo Rhayne
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6 posted 12-28-1999 05:44 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Tis another great poem!  I like it greatly!


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Elizabeth Santos
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7 posted 12-28-1999 06:02 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sy,

Exquisite is the magic pen
Whose song of lovely poetry
Lifts me up and takes me off
To sail the crest of sparkling sea

This is beautiful!!!
Love ya, Liz
Severn
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8 posted 12-28-1999 06:02 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Very nice imagery Sy - (you're doing the Oscar thing again...   )

Wonderful.

K

 ...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara
Nate Dogg
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9 posted 12-28-1999 06:22 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Great imagery and such strong words!

 Nathan
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10 posted 12-28-1999 06:38 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Seymour...*sigh*....incredibly lovely, as always...and I agree...every stanza is a bit of magic. Love this one much  

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


Denise
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11 posted 12-28-1999 08:37 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

A lovely voyage!  

 Denise


Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 12-28-1999 10:23 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Pff,
Beautiful comment thank you. *L*
Eloise,
Your joy is my joy.
Meadow,
An eligaant comment, thank you.
Melissa,
a wonderful comment thank you so much.
Nan,
I know you have a thing for the sea,
but how about me? *L* Sy
Echo,
Thank you  Echo.
Elizabeth,
I was thinking of you
when I wrote it. *L* Sy
Severn,
Thank you severn, comming from you  it means alot.
Nate,
Thanks for the strong words.
Caroline,
Thanks for the beautiful comment. *L*
Deenise,
thank you my sweet, love you too.
Marge Tindal
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13 posted 12-28-1999 11:20 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Seymour -

Gosh ... this is just great !
Here I am ... in a little tug boat
and you go sailing by ... in a love boat !
I'm swamped by your 'wake' !
Glub ! Glub !


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Paul Hoekman
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14 posted 12-28-1999 11:29 PM       View Profile for Paul Hoekman   Email Paul Hoekman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Paul Hoekman's Home Page   View IP for Paul Hoekman

I really enjoyed this poem, as a sailor it went straight to my inner soul and warmed me.
       Thanks,
             Paul
Martie
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15 posted 12-28-1999 11:34 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Beautiful poem Sy.
Dr.Moose1
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Sy,
Arrrrrrr...  Me Matey,
T'was an inspiring piece .
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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Ah, yes, this is lovely!  You've put a delicate, beautiful worded poem together that speaks to me of the love between my husband and myself.  Wonderful analogy! I couldn't have put it better! 45
Seymour Tabin
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18 posted 12-29-1999 10:09 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Marge,
Well for pity sake come aboard the love boat.
*L* Sy.
Paul,
So glad you enjoyed it, thank you.
Martie,
Thanks for the nice comment.
Dr,
Inspiring sounds good to me. Thank you.
Rosemary,
Beautiful comment, thank you.
hoot_owl_rn
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19 posted 12-29-1999 10:38 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Seymore, I believe this to be amoung your most beautiful yet  

And so upon a ship of love
We two set sail as one
And through the thick and hazy fog
We rise to greet the sun

We sail uncharted waters
Off the coasts so far away
Hoping to reach the quiet shores
Of blissfullness someday

The futures not fanthoms away
But here within our grasp
So launch the sails, set course home
And tighten up the hatch

And when our journeys ended
And we've finally reached the shore
We'll anchor up our ship of dreams
The seas to sail no more



[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 12-29-1999).]
Elizabeth Santos
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20 posted 12-29-1999 10:59 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Hoot,
Beautiful!
I was going to write this exact same poem, myself, same words and everything!

Sy, Am I invited to go along?
Liz
Seymour Tabin
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21 posted 12-29-1999 11:39 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Hoot and Elizabeth,
Your both invited
And we'll one grand time.
Love ya both.
Sy
Hoot, Your poem is just beautiful

[This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (edited 12-29-1999).]
Christopher
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22 posted 12-29-1999 11:41 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Sy, you have a marvellous gift for words!
Richard
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Great---- very stirring poem. Extremely well done.
Tamera
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Beautiful!!!!!!!!  
 
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