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Dark Angel
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0 posted 1999-12-28 07:42 AM



      My Heart Sings.

As the Silver moon sparkles
High up in the dark velvet sky
Your eyes shimmer like bubbles
Chasing ghostly butterflies nearby

Your Aura aglow, my candlelight
Your smile as pretty as fireflies
I sigh, at such a mystical sight
You're the rainbow in my dark skies

You're the wonder of my world
Whether it's real or fantasy
All of my senses unfurled
I am lost within your beauty

My heart sings when I'm with you
Let's dance forever, never apart
Like tiny droplets of the morning dew
Falling, gently upon my heart.


         Dark Angel
        


 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



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Sven
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1 posted 1999-12-28 07:47 AM


This is beautiful Dark Angel. . .

It flows nicely, you have wonderful imagery. . . and, I just like it!

The "Silver moon" and "your aura, my candlelight". . . very good. . .



 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Dark Angel
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2 posted 1999-12-28 08:01 AM


Sven, Thank you my friend.  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



whiskey
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3 posted 1999-12-28 08:08 AM


This is beautiful , really sets a picture in my mind,  very good


Moonshine
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4 posted 1999-12-28 08:56 AM


Wow DA - this is truly beautiful hon - well done!

Huggs.......

hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 1999-12-28 10:11 AM


Very beautiful DA...that passionate poet in you shines very clear in this one  
caroline
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6 posted 1999-12-28 10:57 AM


DA, this is simply superb..."your aura, my candlelight..."  Oh, what a lovely line that is    A really beautiful piece of work here, my friend!

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain



Poet deVine
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7 posted 1999-12-28 10:59 AM


A lovely poem! Visually elegant! I like this one!  

Meadowmuse
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8 posted 1999-12-28 11:15 AM


Your natural and earthen elements bring this piece to life...rhythmically resonant, pleasure to read.  
RSEvans
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9 posted 1999-12-28 11:16 AM


"like tiny droplets of morning dew falling on my heart"...beautiful
Echo Rhayne
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10 posted 1999-12-28 04:35 PM


This is beautiful!  I especially liked the last stanza!


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~


Severn
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11 posted 1999-12-28 04:43 PM


Very dreamy, very good...  K
Dark Angel
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12 posted 1999-12-28 05:39 PM


Thank you ALL so very much for your kind and lovely comments, I do appreciate them all.  
It makes me happy to know you enjoyed it.  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



Denise
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13 posted 1999-12-28 10:12 PM


Very beautiful, Dark Angel! So lovely!

 Denise



RainbowGirl
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14 posted 1999-12-29 12:30 PM


This is so precious, it's gorgeous.

HUGS

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.


WhtDove
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15 posted 1999-12-29 12:46 PM


Hey DA!  Love how you describe this with the words you've used here. Very well done my friend!

 <*\\\><
Where there is faith,
there is love.
Where there is love,
there is peace.
Where there is peace,
there is GOD.
Where there is GOD,
there is no need.

Hallmark



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16 posted 1999-12-29 12:48 PM


Lovely.  Truly lovely.  I liked it.

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."


Dark Angel
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17 posted 1999-12-29 02:19 AM


Denise, thank you so much  
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RG, thank you Hon  
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WhtDove Angel, thanks so much, glad you liked it
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Astraea, Thank You!!

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



JennyLee
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18 posted 2000-01-04 12:52 PM


Most excellent Dark Angel...
I enjoyed this one very much  


Jenny Lee


 Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual.


Dark Angel
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19 posted 2000-01-04 04:22 PM


Jenny Lee, thanks so much my friend  
havent seen you around, where ya been ?

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



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