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Going, Going Gone |
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John Yaws Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 860Texas 
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Ice upon the windshield, and on the highway, too- Pucker factor high tonight, he’s trying to make it through. Out from home for thirteen days, feels just like a year- Wants to hold the wife to night, and just to have her near. Fighting sleep and icy roads, trying to make it home- The trucker’s life’s no party, far too much time alone... Black ice on a real bad curve, hear that North wind moan- Through the rail and down the cliff, he’s going, going, gone. Young man in a foxhole, somewhere in Vietnam- Asks himself, “Do Mom and Dad wonder where I am”? In the monsoon rain at night, five thousand miles from home- In a lonely Listening Post...he’s feeling all alone. He thinks, “I want a cigarette, but we can’t smoke at night- But on a rainy night like this...no one will see the light”. Cups his hands and lights a smoke, and heaves a happy sigh- A sniper takes the trigger’s slack, and one more soldier dies. They never learn to mind the rules, they do it on their own- Fools refuse to take advice, and therein they go wrong.. Dumb mistakes and careless risks compose a sad old song- Pay the fiddler, have your dance, you’re going, going, gone. Visit My Home Page http://www.geocities.com/montcogunslinger/HomePage.html |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Heartbreaking. E. "Boys and girls together, me and Mamie O'Rourke Tripped the light fantastic on the sidewalks of New York." |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Man, do I like this one! Great, great work here, gs.....and so true. Sometimes we ARE called on to be responsible for our actions. Damn, this is good. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very sad, and of course, very wonderful. Denise |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Most excellent GS! This one make ya stop and think before bending those rules. Love your work...all of it. <*\\\>< Where there is faith, there is love. Where there is love, there is peace. Where there is peace, there is GOD. Where there is GOD, there is no need. Hallmark |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is very well done Gunslinger. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
A somber message, artfully presented. |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
How do you do it? Write such powerful poems? |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
These are wise words, my friend... Caution thrown to the wind is often a catastrophe in the making..... Very well done, indeed...  |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
WoW...It is sad how many people tend to disregard the rules, and end up lsoing their life because of it. And people wonder why there are rules...well prime examples here! You have said it very well I must say! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
Gunslinger your the best! I love all your work. thankyou |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
I don't think there's ever been anyone's poetry more powerful than yours. It always hits home, provides a thought, and gives a view of the world from every possible angle. Such a lovely poem...and very truly so. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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