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Going, Going Gone

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John Yaws
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0 posted 12-27-1999 10:07 PM       View Profile for John Yaws   Email John Yaws   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit John Yaws's Home Page   View IP for John Yaws

Ice upon the windshield, and on the highway, too-
Pucker factor high tonight, he’s trying to make it through.
Out from home for thirteen days, feels just like a year-
Wants to hold the wife to night, and just to have her near.

Fighting sleep and icy roads, trying to make it home-
The trucker’s life’s no party, far too much time alone...
Black ice on a real bad curve, hear that North wind moan-
Through the rail and down the cliff, he’s going, going, gone.

Young man in a foxhole, somewhere in Vietnam-
Asks himself, “Do Mom and Dad wonder where I am”?
In the monsoon rain at night, five thousand miles from home-
In a lonely Listening Post...he’s feeling all alone.

He thinks, “I want a cigarette, but we can’t smoke at night-
But on a rainy night like this...no one will see the light”.
Cups his hands and lights a smoke, and heaves a happy sigh-
A sniper takes the trigger’s slack, and one more soldier dies.

They never learn to mind the rules, they do it on their own-
Fools refuse to take advice, and therein they go wrong..
Dumb mistakes and careless risks compose a sad old song-
Pay the fiddler, have your dance, you’re going, going, gone.



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1 posted 12-27-1999 10:10 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Heartbreaking.

E.

 "Boys and girls together, me and Mamie O'Rourke
Tripped the light fantastic on the sidewalks of New York."


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2 posted 12-27-1999 10:11 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Man, do I like this one! Great, great work here, gs.....and so true. Sometimes we ARE called on to be responsible for our actions. Damn, this is good.
Denise
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3 posted 12-27-1999 10:15 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very sad, and of course, very wonderful.

 Denise


WhtDove
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4 posted 12-27-1999 10:41 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Most excellent GS!  This one make ya stop and think before bending those rules.  Love your work...all of it.

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Where there is faith,
there is love.
Where there is love,
there is peace.
Where there is peace,
there is GOD.
Where there is GOD,
there is no need.

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Martie
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5 posted 12-27-1999 11:27 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

This is very well done Gunslinger.
Meadowmuse
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6 posted 12-27-1999 11:43 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

A somber message, artfully presented.
Tara Simms
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7 posted 12-28-1999 12:24 AM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms

How do you do it?  Write such powerful poems?
Nan
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8 posted 12-28-1999 01:07 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

These are wise words, my friend... Caution thrown to the wind is often a catastrophe in the making..... Very well done, indeed...
Echo Rhayne
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9 posted 12-28-1999 05:04 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

WoW...It is sad how many people tend to disregard the rules, and end up lsoing their life because of it.  And people wonder why there are rules...well prime examples here!  You have said it very well I must say!

 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~

Paul Hoekman
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10 posted 01-15-2000 11:28 PM       View Profile for Paul Hoekman   Email Paul Hoekman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Paul Hoekman's Home Page   View IP for Paul Hoekman

Gunslinger
your the best!
I love all your work.
thankyou
Astraea
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11 posted 01-15-2000 11:31 PM       View Profile for Astraea   Email Astraea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Astraea

I don't think there's ever been anyone's poetry more powerful than yours.  It always hits home, provides a thought, and gives a view of the world from every possible angle.  Such a lovely poem...and very truly so.

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

 
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