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A Softly Keener Place

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Martie
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   A Softly Keener Place

I have been there
in the gloaming
following thoughts
in whim of wake
across all reason
out of orbit
into some far stranger gate

Conversations
past and present
speeches made
to unseen foes
imagined failures
planned revisions
in and out this porthole go

There is a picture
lit and lovely
deep inside
the cave of see
sometimes red
and sometimes purple
a kaleidoscope
just made for me

It is there
to light the passage
turn the rancor
flay the thief
just behind the turn of eyelash
is the door to close out grief

It is right
to stay the questions
the wretched mind
tries to retain
and listen how
the peaceful cricket’s
music of the night remains

I'll remember
velvet touches
song of laughter
tear of grace
behind the darkness
night will take me
to a softly keener place.
© Copyright 1999 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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A master of rhyme, a master of prose, a master of words-
A Masterpiece!
Liz
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2 posted 12-27-1999 09:24 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Beautifully written, Martie. Thanks for sharing.

Elizabeth

 "Boys and girls together, me and Mamie O'Rourke
Tripped the light fantastic on the sidewalks of New York."


Seymour Tabin
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Martie,
To me you have written an epopee.
Denise
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4 posted 12-27-1999 09:31 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I love that Place! This is beautiful, Martie! Very beautiful!  

 Denise


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5 posted 12-27-1999 09:57 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

How incredibly beautiful this is! I need to read it several times. Wonderful, Martie!
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This poem gives one a lovely visit to your "Softly Keener Place," and allows a revisit to that oft~forgotten place of one's own. Quite lovely.

Craig
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7 posted 12-27-1999 10:34 PM       View Profile for Craig   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Craig



Superb poem, it dances off the tongue so well.

Thanks for the read

 Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool:
But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet.


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Oh, do take me too  
Echo Rhayne
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Martie you did a great job with this one!


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~

Martie
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Liz-what a wonderful thing to say, thank you.

Elizabeth-the poet that doesn't share words talks to himself.  Thank you

Sy-An epopee, my goodness what a wonder for me.  You are too sweet.

Denise-you have a place so similar.  Thanks for the read.

Balladeer-Your words are a wonder to me.  

Meadowmuse-thank you for reading and welcome. I have enjoyed your poems.

Craig-I like that, dancing off the tongue, thanks.

Echo and Hoot-thanks so much for reading and commenting.  You can come with me anytime, and welcome.

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
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Lovely!

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

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12 posted 12-29-1999 05:28 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Gasping for air...need this one!
Can I keep it?

K

 ...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara
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