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My Autistic Son (A Petrarchan Sonnet -- Repost from CA)

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jbouder
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Autistic shackles hold your little tongue
From telling me the punch line of the joke
That caused your fits of laughter to provoke
Excited happy tears.  You’ve never sung
Your fav'rite Barney song and, when you clung
To me that winter night when you awoke
To bitter, fearful sobs, you never spoke
A word of what tormented one so young.
Although autistic shackles bind his speech,
His love is blazoned on his beaming smile.
Although I missed the punch line of that jest,
I laughed myself to happy tears.  And each
Dark night when he awakes and fears defile
His sleep, in Daddy’s arms he finds his rest.
---

*A Petrarchan Sonnet has a rhyme scheme of (usually) abbaabba cdecde.  The first eight lines present a problem or argument and the final six the resolution.

 Jim

"If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther

© Copyright 1999 Jim Bouder - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 12-27-1999 05:18 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Superb!!!

HUGS

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.

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2 posted 12-27-1999 05:32 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

This is beautiful, and very touching...especially to me!  Great job!


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3 posted 12-27-1999 06:06 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Great job, J-with the sonnet and the raising of your son. Just beautiful.

Elizabeth

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Set every threadbare sail-
And give her to the god of storms,
The lightning and the gale!
-Oliver Wendell Holmes


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4 posted 12-27-1999 08:01 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Beautiful poem, Jim and beautiful love!

 Denise


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5 posted 12-27-1999 08:08 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Oh, Jim ...
I could just hug your neck for this one.
Worked with an autistic child for four years and could see him in your poem.
A wonderful reminder of his need for hugs ...
and my need to give them to him.
Bless you ... bless your son.
Love ~*Marge*~


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6 posted 12-27-1999 09:22 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

This is so beautifully done and so full of the love and understanding of your son.



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the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
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There is so much love in this poetry, not to mention that it's a beautiful poem unto itself. Congratulations on many counts!
Liz
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8 posted 12-27-1999 11:24 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Nice one.... and in iambic pentameter too...
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Your devotion is the true poetry here, to my way of thinking. ('tis not to say that the poem isn't grand...it surely is!)
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10 posted 12-28-1999 06:03 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Wonderful!
Well wrought - well thought.

I like this.  K
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Thanks, everyone, for your kind replies.  And, Nan, of course it's in iambic pentameter. I wouldn't want to disappoint my teachers.  

 Jim

"If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther

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Top notch and so to the top you go.
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So very moving Jim....a beautiful tribute of a special
love between father and son
Wonderful.....

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
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I've often said I read poetry with my heart and not my head. No matter what form this is in, it's a wonderful poem! There is so much love in it! Thank you...
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15 posted 12-28-1999 10:29 AM       View Profile for jbouder   Email jbouder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jbouder

Thanks guys.  While this is at the top I don't have to feel guilty over replying to my own post.

Poet deVine:  I'm on a crusade, of sorts, to prove that head and heart are not necessarily divorced.  By your reaction I suspect I'm getting my point across. Thanks for the fine compliment.

 Jim

"If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther

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16 posted 12-31-1999 01:10 AM       View Profile for Willem   Email Willem   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Willem

Jim, don't change anything in this poem! It's
beautiful the way it is.  We don't let the
shape of a bottle of wine intrude on our
enjoyment of the content, do we?  
A beautiful poem tends to very fragile and
may easily loose some of its impact, its
evocative power if tinkered with by others
than the poet himself.

My wife and I were very moved upon reading
it, because we sometimes took care of two
autistic children for friends of us, so they
could have some respite from their constant
daily cares. We loved those kids as much as
our own, and we understand what you must now
be going through.  We are praying for you
and your son.

Willem
  
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wow man i could never do anythin like this pack a punch and deliver it in style o yuh!
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Wonderful poem!  A loving tribute to a dear little boy.  While most would say he is lucky to have you for a daddy, and so would I, yet, I would add, I can see he is a gift to you as well ... seeing your love for him!
My own child who has a disability has taught me more about life and love than anyone else.




 ...Living is ever like crossing rivers; finding a new life on each shore ... RJG
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Jim a beautiful job here, and I must say you sound like a beautiful man to me, inside where love and caring and fatherhood count.
God bless and Happy New Year hon  

 At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet. (Plato)
~Isis~
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An endeavor most worthy in both skill and emotion.  Well done Jim.

--Kess


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22 posted 12-31-1999 06:41 PM       View Profile for jbouder   Email jbouder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jbouder

I want to thank everyone again for your kind and encouraging comments.  I must admit that I had no idea that this poem would have the impact on others that it evidently had.  I am gladdened on two counts: (1) that I can write a sonnet (something the Forum taught me to do correctly ... must mean its working   ), and (2) that others could be encouraged by my experiences with my oldest son.

Most of us, I think, write poetry to give our thoughts, feelings and experiences and home.  It is an added blessing when others are encouraged or inspired by our poetry.  

My oldest son is 4-1/2 years old and is autistic. He rarely uses language practically and has never spoken in a complete sentence, sung his favorite song, or told me what was going on in his own little world.  We actually compliment each other quite well, considering I don't know when to shut up.  But dispite all of this, we still have a wonderful connection (I assume this was communicated well enough in the sonnet). I am convinced that any parent would feel the same way and do the same things under similar circumstances if they let themselves love their child(ren).  

Thanks again, all of you, for your comments.


 Jim

"If I rest, I rust."  - Martin Luther



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Richard
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Absolutely beautiful, Jim. Can feel your thoughts as I read. Thank you
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This is precious....I enjoyed reading this!!  Your little guy sounds like a cutie!!  

Take Care
Bridgette


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I remember reading this in CA. Excellent sonnet, Jim!

Denise
 
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