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Can Forever Grow Old?
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Can Forever Grow Old? |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali 
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How sweet your voice seems in the dark, How quick you are to love me love. Yet daybreak comes, And we go our seperate ways. With bitter words- The sweetness drains away. Why can't your smile forever shine- When your eyes gaze down on mine? Are you tiring of my love? Are you tiring of me love? Your sweetness, I'll never tire, Yet emerging from inside, Is something that I fear- You don't want me anymore, My love is not enough, And yours is no more. Don't pull away from my glance Face my eyes to yours, And tell my lips in truth- Is forever growing old- Causing you to be cruel? Or am I in the wrong- It's just a lover's quarrel? My love- I need you always, Tell me- For then my doubts will spill away. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is very heartfelt, devina. It has a beautiful innocense and longing to it. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Coming from you, that's quite a compliment sweetie! Thank you so much... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Very heartfelt |
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neokano New Member
since 1999-12-22
Posts 5 |
This poem reminds me of something that I wish to forget. I have a loved one....well someone I think Im in love with...who is leaving. This poem made my heart fall and wonder how to people who once where so much in love can decide one day that the look in their mates eye is not enough. When the look stops peircing through your lover I guess there must be something wrong. It is unbelievable. Thank you for your writing. |
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samsonheart Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 72Missouri rez. |
devina, this was a marvelous piece of writing, I could feel the pain involved in writing this one. samsonheart |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Very heartfelt indeed! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Beautiful in its honest simplicity and grace. ...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This poem is so sweet and romantic even though the subject is heartbreak. James |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Really like this one, especially the line, Is forever growing old? Could be a song title. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
I agree with SeptSong....Is forever growing old- The whole poem seems to be defining the meaning of that one line. Its a line we all believed in once too often. Wonderful. James (Parker) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Check your email, Devina, for your surprise!  Denise |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Thank you all for bringing this one back up...I'm flattered!! Denise, the surprise was lovely dear, I was just kidding...but now that I see where jealousy gets me...he he Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Kevin Taylor Member
since 1999-12-23
Posts 185near Vancouver, BC, Canada |
nicely wrought devina. Kevin |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow....the title alone says it all. Not in my eyes, but I have been left to hold "forever" alone to many time to think otherwise. Great poem, devina. Michael oh, and btw, I've blown up my chemisty lab many times...don't worry. Sooner or later we get the mixture right..even if only by chance. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I love some of your lines "face my eyes to yours and tell my lips the truth" Very nice, devina Liz |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Heartfelt and beautiful Devina What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
I already admired the poetry from Amber I now i thought I shall check out the sister  ) (trying to sound like a teen here lol)I like your poetry. A sad moment in life described so nice Well done The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Devina, this is so beautiful , sweet and heartfelt , its wonderful |
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cougaryouth Junior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 25 |
very nice, I havent experienced that to the full yet and I hope not to have to but it is a nice poem |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
LOL@Micheal, I can get that mental picture in my head...I just wonder how many damn chemistry labs I must buy and ruin before the right mixture comes along HelmutB-glad your enjoying my work...so you already "checked out" my little sis huh??? Now you've gon and done it...LOL Thank you all for keeping this one going! I didn't think it to be so great, just alot of hurt and emotion on my part!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Rus Bowden Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 139 |
hi devina, such a love moment said so well. what a poem to awaken to this morning! rus |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome write glad I found this |
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