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Can Forever Grow Old?

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devina
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0 posted 12-26-1999 11:10 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for devina


How sweet your voice seems in the dark,
How quick you are to love me love.
Yet daybreak comes,
And we go our seperate ways.
With bitter words-
The sweetness drains away.

Why can't your smile forever shine-
When your eyes gaze down on mine?
Are you tiring of my love?
Are you tiring of me love?

Your sweetness, I'll never tire,
Yet emerging from inside,
Is something that I fear-
You don't want me anymore,
My love is not enough,
And yours is no more.

Don't pull away from my glance
Face my eyes to yours,
And tell my lips in truth-
Is forever growing old-
Causing you to be cruel?
Or am I in the wrong-
It's just a lover's quarrel?

My love- I need you always,
Tell me-
For then my doubts will spill away.
© Copyright 1999 Tanya Nicole Bustamante - All Rights Reserved
Balladeer
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1 posted 12-26-1999 11:28 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

This is very heartfelt, devina. It has a beautiful innocense and longing to it.
devina
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2 posted 12-26-1999 11:45 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Coming from you, that's quite a compliment sweetie!  Thank you so much...
hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 12-27-1999 12:01 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Very heartfelt
neokano
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4 posted 12-27-1999 12:11 AM       View Profile for neokano   Email neokano   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for neokano

This poem reminds me of something that I wish to forget.  I have a loved one....well someone I think Im in love with...who is leaving.  This poem made my heart fall and wonder how to people who once where so much in love can decide one day that the look in their mates eye is not enough.  When the look stops peircing through your lover I guess there must be something wrong.  It is unbelievable.  Thank you for your writing.
samsonheart
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5 posted 12-27-1999 12:16 AM       View Profile for samsonheart   Email samsonheart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for samsonheart

devina, this was a marvelous piece of writing, I could feel the pain involved in writing this one.

samsonheart
Echo Rhayne
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6 posted 12-27-1999 04:29 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Very heartfelt indeed!


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~

Severn
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7 posted 12-27-1999 04:33 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Beautiful in its honest simplicity and grace.

 ...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara
JamesMichael
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8 posted 01-10-2000 08:30 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

This poem is so sweet and romantic even though the subject is heartbreak.    James
Songbird
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9 posted 01-10-2000 09:02 AM       View Profile for Songbird   Email Songbird   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Songbird's Home Page   View IP for Songbird

Really like this one, especially the line, Is forever growing old?  Could be a song title.
Parker
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10 posted 01-11-2000 12:07 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

I agree with SeptSong....Is forever growing old- The whole poem seems to be defining the meaning of that one line. Its a line we all believed in once too often. Wonderful.


James (Parker)
Denise
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11 posted 01-12-2000 09:36 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Check your email, Devina, for your surprise!


 Denise

devina
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12 posted 01-13-2000 03:04 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Thank you all for bringing this one back up...I'm flattered!!  Denise, the surprise was lovely dear, I was just kidding...but now that I see where jealousy gets me...he he

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Kevin Taylor
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13 posted 01-13-2000 05:01 AM       View Profile for Kevin Taylor   Email Kevin Taylor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kevin Taylor's Home Page   View IP for Kevin Taylor

nicely wrought devina.

 Kevin
Michael
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14 posted 01-13-2000 05:06 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Wow....the title alone says it all.  Not in my eyes, but I have been left to hold "forever" alone to many time to think otherwise.  Great poem, devina.

Michael

oh, and btw, I've blown up my chemisty lab many times...don't worry. Sooner or later we get the mixture right..even if only by chance.
Elizabeth Santos
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15 posted 01-13-2000 08:01 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

I love some of your lines
"face my eyes to yours
and tell my lips the truth"
Very nice, devina
Liz
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16 posted 01-13-2000 08:07 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Heartfelt and beautiful Devina

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


HelmutB
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17 posted 01-13-2000 08:20 AM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

I already admired the poetry from Amber
I now i thought I shall check out the sister  ) (trying to sound like a teen here lol)
I like your poetry.
A sad moment in life
described so nice
Well done


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

whiskey
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18 posted 01-13-2000 08:28 AM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

Devina, this is so beautiful , sweet and heartfelt , its wonderful  
cougaryouth
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19 posted 01-13-2000 08:47 AM       View Profile for cougaryouth   Email cougaryouth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cougaryouth

very nice, I havent experienced that to the full yet and I hope not to have to but it is a nice poem
devina
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20 posted 01-14-2000 03:58 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

LOL@Micheal, I can get that mental picture in my head...I just wonder how many damn chemistry labs I must buy and ruin before the right mixture comes along

HelmutB-glad your enjoying my work...so you already "checked out" my little sis huh??? Now you've gon and done it...LOL

Thank you all for keeping this one going!  I didn't think it to be so great, just alot of hurt and emotion on my part!!!


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Rus Bowden
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21 posted 01-14-2000 07:28 AM       View Profile for Rus Bowden   Email Rus Bowden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rus Bowden

hi devina,

such a love moment said so well.  what a poem to awaken to this  morning!

rus
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22 posted 04-16-2005 04:57 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

awesome write
glad I found this
 
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