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desperado
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since 1999-05-24
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FT Hood,Tx

0 posted 1999-12-26 01:38 AM


show me the world tonight
and I'll show you my heart
show me the things you hide
I'll show you where to start
for there are places in your heart
hidden by walls and dust
places you have long neglected
and they are stained with rust
they are memories of other loves
and ones who stole your dreams
ones you wanted to hide away
or try to remend the seems
but your heart has never healed
you never gave it time
just block it off is all you've done
and it was just a crime
I wish you could just wake up
and see the world before you
and look at me with flowers in my hand
and give me a kiss and thank you


 shine a light so bright that all can see
and you will find the joys that echo within me


© Copyright 1999 James Webster - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 1999-12-26 02:06 AM


Some people wind up sleeping through life because of past hurts. They become frozen with fear of being hurt again. Very good poem, James!

 Denise



Severn
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since 1999-07-17
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2 posted 1999-12-26 02:14 AM


Agreeing with Denise - good poem!
Nan
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3 posted 1999-12-26 08:49 AM


Good plan, James... We need to learn from our experiences, but not hide behind them....
Deb Lynne
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since 1999-08-19
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Where blue skies meet blue ocean
4 posted 1999-12-26 10:21 AM


James....I really liked this one!  Keep up the good writing.
Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
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Somewhere near the Rainbow
5 posted 1999-12-26 11:09 AM


James, this is an excellent poem, such a shame that someone would let the dust, and rust get in the way of seeing a true gentleman standing before them.
Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
6 posted 1999-12-26 12:23 PM


I hope you give her this poem.
There is a lot of truth here.
Liz

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
7 posted 1999-12-26 12:40 PM


Some people never realize what is in front of their very eyes all along.
Pepper
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since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079
Southern Florida
8 posted 1999-12-26 03:08 PM


Lovely Desperado.....

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon



John Yaws
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since 1999-10-09
Posts 860
Texas
9 posted 1999-12-26 03:24 PM


Good job, my friend. well thought out, well worded.
Quiet Lightning
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since 1999-12-26
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10 posted 1999-12-26 03:39 PM


Your poem is da bomb. I liked it.  Your poem describes what I have been doing for two years.
desperado
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since 1999-05-24
Posts 312
FT Hood,Tx
11 posted 1999-12-26 06:49 PM


thanks guys.  I really appreciate the comments.  it's been a fast moving week and I leave on the 28th to head back to work so I'm sorry if I haven't commented to poems that I normally would have done so to, I just have felt so overloaded with words to write that I've been thinking about what to write out than reading other peoples poems.  it'll prolly be that way for a few more times that I'm back.  just a heads up now instead of getting one later.  hope you all had a merry christmas and have a happy new years.


 shine a light so bright that all can see
and you will find the joys that echo within me


Betty Gravitt
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since 1999-09-11
Posts 222
Georgia United States
12 posted 1999-12-26 09:08 PM


desperado, such a wonderful poem.

 B Gravitt



Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
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Canyon Country, CA
13 posted 1999-12-27 03:38 AM


This is beautiful


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~


whiskey
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Australia
14 posted 1999-12-28 08:04 AM


wonderful poem , I really liked it alot


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