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125 posted 10-29-2010 12:46 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

"leave me to surrender to time;"

intense write ma'am.... very well done...
the crux I see in the line above, one not easily forged when the fires that burn heat the outside and not the in...

love to read you.... and find it amazing how your words paint the images

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126 posted 10-29-2010 12:57 PM       View Profile for Amaryllis   Email Amaryllis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Amaryllis

Thank you, sir... funny, though I submit some of the better writing is born of intense emotion, I feel a silly urge to apologize to the world for my anger, which is so apparant in that piece... but I will not, as that would just be a paste of propriety over the truth.  I should have entitled it `mid-life crisis`... lol!  
Thanks for reading me, and for your words.
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127 posted 10-29-2010 01:09 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

don 't you dare apologize.... if you did I would certainly never forgive you for doing so..

your piece is honest and the anger natural. I don't think it is a mid life crisis, but a mid life passage we all endure often in many forms and many times....

yes, intensity does in my opinion often spur the most eloquent passages and fuels the words... complacency, is a slow death...

I do truly enjoy reading you.... and if the author is not honest, then one has to ask what is there to enjoy?

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128 posted 10-29-2010 01:20 PM       View Profile for Amaryllis   Email Amaryllis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Amaryllis

Quite so!     Glad I didn`t, then...   
I`m sure these emtions are universal... for some reason I was thinking only women would relate, but of course men must go through a  similar forge...  hoping the metaphor carries through and we emerge stronger~?  =p   lol
Nobody told me this about the 40`s...
Maybe 50`s will be better...lol!
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129 posted 10-29-2010 01:29 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

easier? not sure... the 50's bring on their own set of retrospective looks and challenges....
we're all vain to some degree or the other...and vanity is one of those things that we always find poking us, often upturning a perfectly wonderful thought and spilling it out of where we thought we had it carefully stowed.... age does bring with it changes to our looks, our energy, our introspections...

the 40's aren't so bad...if you stay grounded in what is important and what you have, rather than what you were... it old and shopworn... but it is like good wine, and gets better, if you let it age properly ma'am...

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130 posted 10-29-2010 01:33 PM       View Profile for Amaryllis   Email Amaryllis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Amaryllis

Well said, my good man. Thank you.  I have a lot of blessings to focus upon!     Truly.
Best~
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131 posted 11-01-2010 04:17 PM       View Profile for Amaryllis   Email Amaryllis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Amaryllis

She`s So Nice, So Friendly
.
.
it was  one of those languid hours
the type of evening you can`t quite recall
years on, though you didn`t mind
losing a minute here, an afternoon
there, for the chance to ease your fingers
beneath the stranglehold and catch a
sweet breath of sanity...
when the phone`s whine pursed your lips
in the most magnetic  part
of the warm novel in your hands
well, you would have ignored it, let it be
just a distant contrail of awareness but
he answered it, now didn`t he
yes, and so you sighed, put down the book,
said hello, with a chalcedony smile
and a heart of early mulberry
when they`re green and bitter
but oh so pretty on the tree
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132 posted 11-01-2010 04:31 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

(chuckling)
  may I never be
  compared to mulberry
  

  you captured a moment and a feel, a duty and the underlying desire to have simply ignored....

well done as always ma'am... your writes of late take on more of the subtle and yet vivid descriptives... enjoying!
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133 posted 11-01-2010 04:36 PM       View Profile for Amaryllis   Email Amaryllis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Amaryllis

Lol!  Thanks... yeah, sometime`s I`m fascinated by the masks we wear, and how well they work at times... really, I`m not a bitter ol` gal, but just writing it all, the salt and the sugar in the raw... in my way  
Thanks for reading me. It is a compliment.  
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134 posted 11-03-2010 02:59 PM       View Profile for Amaryllis   Email Amaryllis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Amaryllis

"What`s wrong, love?" his thumb blesses the arch
beneath my eye, where the skin is thin
and collects tears like a baptismal.
I want his touch to burn
and steam these fears,
lift them to the air,  the way my grandmother`s hands
smoothed soaked cotton under the iron,
hiss and spit, then heated curls-
in an arabesque above the crisping fabric.
"It`s nothing"- this is what we say
when the gravid weight of womanhood
presses hard the wisdom years have earned,
slapped the practiced patience
from the bosom, what can he know of this?
The secret pull of tides, within my blood?
The ebb and swell of transparencies,
helpless in the turn, the tumble-
at times incendiary, then the cold-
I want his touch to brand,
but it is gone.
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135 posted 11-05-2010 03:54 AM       View Profile for rwood   Email rwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rwood

Amaryillis~

Your last piece reached right in to me and left its mark. The way you said what you said with such depth and few words--you speak the language I so revere.

Amen & thank you for writing.
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136 posted 11-05-2010 10:01 AM       View Profile for Amaryllis   Email Amaryllis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Amaryllis

Thank you so much, Regina  (if I may)        That`s what we want, as writers, eh? To grab the reader...  yes!  I appreciate your comment immensely~~  
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Best to you~
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quote:
"It`s nothing"- this is what we say
when the gravid weight of womanhood
presses hard the wisdom years have earned,
slapped the practiced patience
from the bosom, what can he know of this?
The secret pull of tides, within my blood?


Young lady...
you are wise against your years.

Brava!

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138 posted 11-08-2010 08:50 PM       View Profile for Amaryllis   Email Amaryllis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Amaryllis

Thank you, Sunshine     Wish I were blissfully ignorant, at times..      lol
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139 posted 11-09-2010 05:01 PM       View Profile for Amaryllis   Email Amaryllis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Amaryllis

*Going to scribble here, as I`ve made enough of a nuisance of myself on the boards... lol
.
.
Doctor could you help me
no, it doesn`t ache
except when I bite my tongue
or chew my lip in desire
see, just here, where the eye teeth press
longer, sharper, every day
I used to be able to conceal
their pointed agression, but
now each week brings fresh blood
and wounds unintended
why does their glossed enamel peek
through my speaking mouth
shiny knives of ivory
flashing beneath my smile
so I must laugh behind my palms
that the fangs won`t show
oh help if you can, to smooth
or file, maybe pull them from me
or better yet, just dress them up
in sweetly rounded caps so innocent
beautiful again, and so unthreatening

[This message has been edited by Amaryllis (11-09-2010 05:47 PM).]

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140 posted 11-11-2010 08:47 AM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

OK..I like the concept... but struggle a bit with the flow.

Doctor could you help me?

no, it doesn`t ache
except when I bite my tongue
or chew my lip in desire
see,just here,
where the eye teeth press

I used to be able to conceal
their pointed agression,
but now each week brings fresh blood
and wounds unintended

why does their glossed enamel peek
through my speaking mouth?

These shiny knives of ivory
flashing beneath my smile
have forced my smile behind palms
that they won`t show
(why?) ( fear, hurt, or propensity to cut
even in a smile?)

oh help if you can,
(you begin by asking Dr to help, then offer here the answers not as questions but as solutions perhaps...)
Can you not help smooth
or file, maybe pull them from me
or better yet, can you dress them up
in sweetly rounded caps so innocent
beautiful again, and so unthreatening?

(conclusion?)

Or must they tear apart the lips
and all they touch?
just thoughts..... I like the concept and the underlying metaphors.
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141 posted 11-11-2010 12:01 PM       View Profile for Amaryllis   Email Amaryllis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Amaryllis

Thank you SO much, Ron~!     I sure appreciate the help, your eyes, and your thoughts... that means a lot. Your points are valid and interesting... I`ll play with this, maybe post up a revision when I think it`s tighter.  This particular one was written `off the cuff`, as opposed to those I`ve sweated over. The metaphor may be tired. And I appreciate your letting me know that the flow stutters... yes, I`ll be monkeying with it, more.  
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Thanks again~
Sharon
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142 posted 11-18-2010 12:18 AM       View Profile for Amaryllis   Email Amaryllis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Amaryllis

Sometimes it is so still
where cyan sleeps
deep, no sigh of breeze
ruffles these pages
doldrums slick and shined
so motionless
where once was billlows
rising with the moon
where life and all its revelry
would leap from thought to thought
call, reply, repeat, and answer
point and counterpoint
in myriad voice
mingled in the blue like
crowds of shorebirds
and one`s own call might
put it final over
into unbearable
sweet
harmony
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