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Abbeon
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0 posted 2007-10-17 03:12 PM


Okay I actually have a few weird problems so please, PLEASE, Please help.

1. it seems that I can not write anything without to meanings or a dark twist all that writing does not seem darker than half the stuff in dark poetry and yet to me is a "fluffy bunny poem" I even tried writing a poem about a fluffy bunnies, my bunny turned evil and a wolf showed up (my bunny lived) how can I write quality poems with out offending people

2 I have spiritual poems but there not about the Christian religion because i am not a Christian I am a Hindu-Christian. Can I still post them in spiritual journey?

3. How can I find out if I can post a poem with out offending anyone?

Thanks Abbeon

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1 posted 2007-10-17 03:21 PM


you can't please everyone, if it falls within the guidelines, you will be fine. As for the spiritual poems, please post them, I highly doubt you will offend anyone, it's not the Christian poetry forum, it's about spirituality, if someone doesn't like it they don't need to read it again or reply to it, it's that simple. Just go over the guidelines and make sure you aren't going against those and you will be doing great. I'm glad your bunnie lived btw... lol
hope that helps some.

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2 posted 2007-10-17 07:32 PM


Sea advises you well - Also, if you're wondering about a particular poem, you can always run it by a moderator.  Any of us would be happy to assess it for you..


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3 posted 2007-10-18 05:43 PM


Okay thanks for the advice I really needed it for the poems and do i just email what i would like reviewed to a moderator and than have it sent back? And would anyone like to volunteer to read my work before it’s posted?

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4 posted 2007-10-18 06:34 PM


email me your poem (or any other moderator) and I will read it and let you know if it would go against any guidelines, or perhaps be able to tell you what forum I think it would get the best response in. I will send it back along with my thoughts.  


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5 posted 2007-10-18 08:24 PM


Abbeon.

I have the same problem, it was brought to my attention a while back and so I set out to write a poem about a fawn.

In the end it died by running out in front of a family filled car... causing alot of tragic events and heart break.

Some of us are here to keep things grounded... at least thats what I tell people these days.

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6 posted 2007-10-23 01:36 AM


I also burned the poem.  ;-)
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7 posted 2007-10-23 09:23 AM


3 -- Do it. If anyone is offended by a poem written earnestly and well, the problem is within them, not you.

2 -- I, for one, will look forward to reading them!

1 -- Darkness ALWAYS comes before light. Any artist will paint dark canvasses at first, and any writer will write things that are from the darker part of his spirit, before the light shines through. Some will produce things that seem artificially light, but that's a form of darkness too. That's the way it was for me, trying to seem light as a disguise for the dark. Now when I write darkly it brings my light into sharper relief. Let your darkness out, come to terms with it, and know that when your glass is clean the light will be there.

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8 posted 2007-10-23 09:28 AM


I don't agree with that, I think that is a personal peception. I don't think dark ALWAYS comes before light. But it's fine that you think so. I just wouldn't say that for all writers that is the case, but I am sure for many it may be. I think it depends on the person and their outlook or even their state of mind when they go to express themselves.
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9 posted 2007-10-23 10:58 AM


I have to agree with Sea on that point.

I write dark because my outlook towards humanity and life itself is a dark one.

Unless you are going by the bible, where darkness was upon the face of the earth etc etc then yes Darkness does come before light.

I've met a few poets who were both shocked and saddened by my ability to inject darkness into pretty much anything where they could only ever inject light.

To each their own.

The trick is to embrace your natural talent and roll with it, only then will your work flow seamlessly.

Thats just my 2 cents worth.  ;-)

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10 posted 2007-10-23 02:56 PM


Your 2 cense seeker72, counts and bought every one a huge smile and a hug as well as the sincere and unusually joy of a shadow writer poet. (What I call a poet who writes thoughts and fears that are trapped in the corner of a mind) thanks for your comments unfortunately tragedy has struck, (I can’t find my poetry book) and so I have to re-write a few poems. Oh and Seeker72 I know a few people who like me think that you poems are truthful wonderful because of the fact you can write about the simple darkness in a mind and soul and if you and a few other poets stopped writing in dark poetry id be lost.

Hugs and smiles from

Abbeon

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11 posted 2007-10-23 03:51 PM


It is a pleasure to have helped.

Re-writing a poem from just your mind can be not only daunting it can also leave you wondering if you got it back just right.

It has happened to me several times.

I'm glad you like my work and the others of which you speak... whom ever they might be I thank them also.

I shall keep posting poems in the Dark section as I have 3 books worth and half way through my fourth.

Wheres a publisher when you need one?  ;-)

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12 posted 2007-10-23 05:11 PM


It's amazing how attitudes change about various forms of poetry, Abbeon. When I first joined PiP a few years ago, I could not understand how people could write so intensely about dark issues. I could understand movies, yes...but poetry? So, I kept reading...and soon I began to understand more and more about how people face various issues. [Even an old dog like me can learn a new trick! )

Seems like you got a lot of sound advice. I will look for your writings.




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13 posted 2007-10-24 02:47 PM


Okay I finally did it… I wrote my first non-dark poem and posted it in spiritual journeys. If any one would care to read its called Morning’s Sonnet.
Thanks for all your help. Hope to have more soon,

Abbeon.

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14 posted 2007-10-24 03:30 PM


I read it and loved it.


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