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Wobbly Head Bob
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since 05-15-2000
Posts 309
Virginia, USA


0 posted 05-15-2000 03:35 PM       View Profile for Wobbly Head Bob   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wobbly Head Bob


Posting several of his own works the new kid is barely noticed and surely not recognized.  Starting ealry in the day he posts 5 or 6 of his own personal writings in several rooms in hopes of replies, critiques, or even verbal slap downs for his idle banter printed in a loosely structured rhyming scheme.  Now fairly late in the day, he has seen none of these, whilst others post two hours later, and have 20 responces 10 minutes after initially posting.  He realizes this may be due to seniority and perhaps this is a favorite of the place, and even he has to post a reply because what he's just read did in fact blow him away.  He's just looking for insight just hoping to touch the soul even lightly whisper something across the spirit or shed light on a subject just barely peaking from another conciousness.  He desperately needs to know if all is in vain, if all he is is just another silly poet poseur on the verge of causing his pencils to persue mass suicide.  Maybe impatient, maybe a little too wanting of another who can trully read what is written, who sees the meaning when logic has been knocked on its head and sent to the floor in a helpless crumpled mass.  

Sorry, just wanted to ***** cause no one was responding to my work.  Thanks!  (no replies necessary)

PS. not that I'll get any!  
Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 08-22-99
Posts 23002


1 posted 05-15-2000 04:11 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Hi Bob, no your efforts are not in vain, be patient, the replies will come, sometimes it just takes a little time until you and your work become known to others. Check out some of your posts in The Corner Pub, there are some replies there, now.  Also, post each poem only in one forum, the one you deem most appropriate for each poem. Posting a piece in more than one forum is against the guidelines. It is also advisable not to post too many back to back. Most people have limited time and can only read so many in one sitting. Perhaps that is why some of yours have gone unread so far. Welcome to Passions, I'm sure that you will love it here, as I do.

Denise
Poet deVine
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Member Empyrean
since 05-26-99
Posts 25869
Hurricane Alley


2 posted 05-15-2000 05:16 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I promise to go read your poetry if you will tell me why you chose this user name!!!  
Sunshine
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Member Caelestus
since 06-25-99
Posts 67715
Listening to every heart


3 posted 05-15-2000 05:34 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Hello new kid on the block...first, take denise seriously, she knows her stuff;

second, once you supply an answer to Poet deVine, who REALLY knows her stuff, then

three, I will go read some of your work.

Keep your chin up, you just GOT here!!!  Welcome to Passions!

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

Nan
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since 05-20-99
Posts 24426
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA


4 posted 05-15-2000 06:18 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

But, Sunshine - My understanding is that if he keeps his chin up, it will by definition be ungrounded - thereby causing his head to wobble even more than it already is...

My suggestion would be simply to comment on others' poetry.. Become more visible - wobble about their posts - Let yourself be known - and above all.... My best ad-VICE - Keep your head screwed on securely at all times... Don't be bobbing around quite so much..."If you can keep your head - when all about you are losing theirs and blaming it on you..."





[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 05-15-2000).]
doreen peri
Member Rara Avis
since 05-25-99
Posts 8028
Virginia


5 posted 05-15-2000 07:41 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

Bob, m'friend... welcome to passions... i echo the others in that you will love it here... i think the 'problem' was that you posted several poems during mid-day when people were at work....

this is a much more populated/active posting board than the scroll ... but most people are 'here' in the evenings, not as many during the day... except for... maybe... the addicts... LOL

hang in there, m'friend.. you are a fine writer and your work will be recognized.. i have no doubt in my mind... oh... and .. you might want to click the box that says to email you when you have a response.. i do that..just an idea...

oh and also.. i agree with Nan.. make your presence known by responding to others... just as at the scroll.. they will get to know your name and respond to you because they remember your name and that you responded to them...

thanks for meeting us in the alley.... write, post... it will be read...

oh, and btw... i often get skipped over, too... oh well... life is short... some people skip dessert... hehe  
WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 07-22-99
Posts 9561
Illinois


6 posted 05-15-2000 11:15 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Welcome! They all have a point here! I did a search today and see that you posted different poems in different forums, which is good! You did post one of the same poems in two different active forums though, and that we discourage.

I saw and replied to your post in spiritual. You need to reply to others work as well. It kind of goes hand in hand. The more you reply to others work the better known you become, they get to know you through this. Pretty much how we communicate with each other is through our replies to one another.

I did see you post poems in Spiritual, but I didn't see your replies to any of them.
You will get the hang of things, and find that this place holds a lot of wonderful people! It's our home away from home.

I hope you have a great time and enjoy yourself. I see your already taking advantage of the many forums we have here and that's GREAT!

If you need any help or have questions, feel free to give me an email!
Alle'cram
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since 02-28-2000
Posts 1827
Texas


7 posted 05-16-2000 10:16 AM       View Profile for Alle'cram   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alle'cram

Wow, I loved all these replies. (What was the question?)lol. I was just browsing and ran upon this and from the replies I have learned a lot. I think I post one poem in two separate forums once, (didn't know) and I discovered I may be a addict, ugh!
If I remembered the question, I'm sure I would have yet another answer but these are great replies! I laughed at some and became wiser with others.......if I just remembered  the question....
Wobbly Head Bob
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since 05-15-2000
Posts 309
Virginia, USA


8 posted 05-16-2000 11:00 AM       View Profile for Wobbly Head Bob   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wobbly Head Bob

Wow, ok, where to begin?!  *lol*  First my apologies for posting same poems in different forums, again I blame this on the wobbling head!  I promise to read and reply become known and soon be famous with riches and babes and big houses on secluded islands...wait, what, where am I?  Anyhow thank you all so much for giving input, I value it very much, and to answer one question; PoetDevine, I chose this name because it, like me, is silly in nature and easily recognizable, also it is not an original name, it came from a comic book I thumbed through years ago, the name stuck, the book didn't!  Again thank you all, and I already feel so welcomed!
doreen peri
Member Rara Avis
since 05-25-99
Posts 8028
Virginia


9 posted 05-16-2000 02:45 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

The name comes from the comic book, "Johnny, the Homicidal Maniac", right?

hehe *wink*
Wobbly Head Bob
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since 05-15-2000
Posts 309
Virginia, USA


10 posted 05-16-2000 03:59 PM       View Profile for Wobbly Head Bob   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wobbly Head Bob

Doreen, you're on cue as always! *lol*



[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 05-16-2000).]
Sunshine
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Member Caelestus
since 06-25-99
Posts 67715
Listening to every heart


11 posted 05-16-2000 04:01 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Oh Geez, guys, I think "Bob" is actually one of the Justin kids...and he will realize that once he really gets into the archives [Ron where are the archives...???] and digs around in some of the old stuff...I think he'll be one off the wall poet who might put some of our older, Wiser, Sillier guys to task!  What say you?
Wobbly Head Bob
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since 05-15-2000
Posts 309
Virginia, USA


12 posted 05-16-2000 04:17 PM       View Profile for Wobbly Head Bob   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wobbly Head Bob

The "Justin kids"?  I have no clue what that is, but as for me...yeah, you could say I'm on a mission! *L*
Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 08-22-99
Posts 23002


13 posted 05-16-2000 04:21 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I agree, Sunshine! 'Bob' would fit right in with the Justin crew and judging from his wit would sure keep the 'Stute' jumping with excitement!  

Denise
Justin Kace
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since 09-13-99
Posts 96
Oz


14 posted 05-16-2000 04:32 PM       View Profile for Justin Kace   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Justin Kace

Justin Kace you're wonderin'
You Wobble-Headed Bob
You'll not put us asunderin'
We'd rather see you lob

We're Justin Thyme to put a halt
To all this silly stuff
No matter how you try you can't
Ever have Justine Uff.....
Justin Sayne
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since 10-09-1999
Posts 64


15 posted 05-16-2000 04:37 PM       View Profile for Justin Sayne   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Justin Sayne

It's Justin Sayne of you to think
We'd not see through you Bob
We're in the stute but we shall not
Let others have our job

We humor all the poets here
With our insanity
If you're applying for employ
Then in the stute you'll be.....


Justin Thyme
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since 09-13-99
Posts 228
Oz


17 posted 05-16-2000 06:29 PM       View Profile for Justin Thyme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Justin Thyme

I guess that I am Justin Thyme
to tell ol' Wobbly it's no crime
to post a zillion poems or five!
It shows that you did just arrive.
They have these silly rules, you know,
and when you break them, they just go
delete you fast right out this place!
It's just a warning, Justin Kace
you didn't read rules, instead
they just might moderate your head!
And then your Wobbly Head will say,
"What did I do so wrong today?"
It will fall off you on the floor
then you will have more in store..!

You see, this fact I can't refute...
It's how I landed in the 'stute!
I was a poet, just like you
I'd write some poems and post them, too
and then I wrote a word real small,
four letters like you write on walls...
well, anyway, it was quite weird,
they warned me, then the worse I feared
came true and Justin Thyme, I flipped
and personalities soon ripped
in two and four and maybe ten,
and guess what happened to me, then?

I got hauled off with men of white
who took me fast into the night
to some big sterile 'stute somewhere
and zapped my head! They didn't care
that I was wanting fast to leave!
They zapped me twice! Would you believe?

So if you think your Wobbly Head
is wobbly now! See mine, instead
and realize it could be worse.
They took my head and then my purse!
For every single zap they gave,
I promised that I would behave!
But then, my friend, they took my bread!
So, hold on to your Wobbly Head!

signed, Justin Thyme
recent 'stute escapee



[This message has been edited by Justin Thyme (edited 05-18-2000).]
WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 07-22-99
Posts 9561
Illinois


18 posted 05-16-2000 11:38 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

LOL well there ya go! You've just met some of the Justin's in the 'stute'  

Good sense of humor is always needed around here and a quick wit if ya mess with our Balladeer, or Long John, oh and we can't forget Toerag!

You'll love it here  
Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 07-17-99
Posts 8273


19 posted 05-17-2000 06:16 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Ok Bob - now that you have been exposed to the severe level of insanity here...sure you want to stick around???

Actually - you'll love it here - it is impossible not to...

Wobbly Head Bob
Member
since 05-15-2000
Posts 309
Virginia, USA


20 posted 05-17-2000 11:02 AM       View Profile for Wobbly Head Bob   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wobbly Head Bob

Justin Possible to think of me
As someone you'd want to be
In your club of lunacy
I've got my own insanity

I'm not Justin Other oddity
Quite normal, in fact, you'll see
Nothing strange 'bout eating tea
Or enlightening convo' with my knee

Justin MyShorts I walk around
Once in a while I'll make a sound
And the world I'm sure I will astound
Whenever they open the padded walls I pound

Justin Credible
Junior Member
since 10-09-1999
Posts 11


21 posted 05-18-2000 06:20 PM       View Profile for Justin Credible   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Justin Credible

This is Justin Credible!
So, you're Justin MyShorts?
Hey, would you please get out of them?
I need them for the courts!

You see, my brother, Justin Sayne,
is Justin Carcerated.
And it would really pull his chain
if while in court, he waited...
for me, it's Justin Credible,
to show up for the trial
while I look through my drawers for shorts
and you wear them in style!!!

(Hey, wash 'em first, wouldja? Thanks)
Justine Uff
Junior Member
since 10-17-1999
Posts 31


22 posted 05-18-2000 07:08 PM       View Profile for Justine Uff   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Justine Uff

My Wobbly friend, it's Justine Uff
Of you two sharing shorts
I might suggest this for you both
Since you're so into sports

That Justin Credible should wear
Those boxers now instead
For Wobbly says that yesterday
He had them on his Head

But don't consider sharing them
Without lye soap and hose
Especially after Wobbly Bob -
Who had to blow his nose...

 
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