stacylynn418, thanks for sharing your words!
I like the overall theme of the poem, I love the succint title. However, consider this: try to think of words as your paintbrush. Don't be afraid to really work the brush and paint a picture with your words. Mash the language a bit. It's ok, you won't break it! If you can become a little more "visual", I think you will find that your words pack more of a punch. Good effort.