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Who Is Caught

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turtle
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0 posted 03-02-2009 05:04 PM       View Profile for turtle   Email turtle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for turtle

Who Is Caught?  (metaphor)

The old man fixed his fetid bait
To rusty brown hook's spindle base,
As scorching sun marked lulling gait
Of dory's fate in God's embrace.

His callused hands dropped weighted line,
He watched it slip down through the sea,
Then looked to sky in hopes divine,
With sad eyes casting prayer to Thee.

He gave his lot to thoughts sublime
Of steely days when he was young,
As whimsy drifted back in time
To slackened bitter aching tongue.

Scant dory lurched to battle wrought,
The line burned deep into his flesh.
He smiled and mused, "Now who is caught?"
As man and fish began to thrash.


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nina1522
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1 posted 03-03-2009 06:39 PM       View Profile for nina1522   Email nina1522   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nina1522

wow this is great!!! im so glad your teaching me, dang your good.
turtle
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2 posted 03-03-2009 06:45 PM       View Profile for turtle   Email turtle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for turtle

HaHaHa!

Thanks nina, I'm happy to see you reading and commenting on other's poems.

psssst

It's one of the best ways to learn how to write poetry.


pontyjim
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Very nice Turtle. Already you are becoming a favorite read! I really enjoy the way you paint such detailed, rich images inside fairly concise lines. Masterful.
turtle
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4 posted 03-07-2009 03:42 PM       View Profile for turtle   Email turtle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for turtle

Thanks Jim,

But do you understand it?

 
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