Let me explain the first stanza because you've completely missed my intention for it; also important to say is that the couple written about is experiencing really rough times, starting off on the wrong foot, failed plans, etc.
This something borrowed something blue, (I'm using that reference to symbolize the couple's union)
Will bring me down in front of you; (in this line, i'm saying that the union will tear him down right in front of her... but i do recognize the allusion to a proposal, so i play on that in the following line)
I'm promising to take you back, (mistake in choice of wording, i should have used 'bring' as opposed to 'take')
To something to look forward to (so he was promising to bring her back to a place where things were good and seemed as though they'd get better)
As for nothing working out, I would have to disagree with that particular statement - Now that we've aired out the nursery rhyme aspect a bit, at least I hope you've shed the light onto the meaning you had attached to those words in regards to my sonnet, I can now share my own. I had a few things in mind going into the writing of this piece: 8 syllable lines; the story I envisioned; and finally my desire to keep it simple. Now the eight syllable lines work wonders for keeping it "simple", because the rhythmic flow of the sonnet comes across much like a nursery rhyme's would. And although love is made to be something quite complicated, I wanted to state that it's the contrary; hence the nursery rhyme feel and my final line: "Here's the bottom line, what stands out most is a success not planned" - to say just go along with the flow of things, and enjoy yourself.
I must say that your feedback is nice to read, I only wish there was more from various others so I could compare. I mean it's one of those "one person has a problem, that's their opinion... a bunch of people have a problem, then there's actually a problem". I think I'm going to share your feedback with my other writer friends and see if they find great value in it.
As for the way you write - very interesting. It's nice that you research your pieces, and present them as poetic essays if you will... it's something I might look to try down the road, definitely much different than what I do myself. Is it possible that we simply have a different eye for poetry? I mean putting aside the technical aspects that all poets are subject to.
Now as for how I write... I don't research it, I have a dictionary handy, no music... and if it takes me more than an hour, it doesn't get completed. I have an issue with poetry that's been beat down over the head with all the technical tools and that's been thought out for ions - I feel as though it isn't sincere, so I stay away from it. I write from an emotion, and the fact of the matter is, if too much times goes by, as does the emotion and inspiration for the poem.