Oh! I like this too.
nina, now you have another idea. It's always good to have more ideas.
Thanks grinch that is very close to what she needs to do here.
Nina, you should read this poem that grinch posted.
This is what poetry is about.
Okay the words and end rhymes here are easy to fix. What is hard
is to fix the context so that the stanza makes sense.
"My hair has swirls of fancy curls
down my back swims black and brown.
i, who wears the princess dress
i am the rightful owner of Spain's crown"
Look at how I've taken what you said in this stanza and clarified the meaning.
"My hair has swirls in fancy curls
Of black and brown, for I am blessed.
My princess dress says I am heir,
To Spainish Crown and Royal Crest"
I'm not saying this is what we have to do and I'd rather you put this in your
own words, but this is kinda what I'm seeing as what you are trying to say???
[This message has been edited by turtle (02-22-2009 08:43 PM).]