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illuminated truth
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0 posted 02-16-2009 11:21 PM       View Profile for illuminated truth   Email illuminated truth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit illuminated truth's Home Page   View IP for illuminated truth

I started it late one morning, haven't finished it yet but would like to know how it is so far.

What was I to do?

Life as I knew it was completely through.

My eyes filled with tears, my heart with sorrow.

I was in such despair, I had gave up all hopes for a tomorrow.

You see, I was a lost soul

With not one dream, aspiration, or goal

I was flying in the sky

My feet were on the ground, yet life was steady passing me by

No one understood me

They felt my mind was void & empty

But that wasn’t right.

Because if they had searched hard enough then they would’ve seen a light.
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turtle
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1 posted 02-17-2009 12:17 AM       View Profile for turtle   Email turtle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for turtle

Hi illumihnated truth,

I'm quoting you here IT:
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
"You see, I was a lost soul
With not one dream, aspiration, or goal"
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

To show you that this is how to write poetry....

Here, you tell me who you are, then describe to me what that means.

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2 posted 02-17-2009 08:48 AM       View Profile for chopsticks   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for chopsticks

You tell me who you are, then describe to me what that means.”

"You see, I was a lost soul
With not one dream, aspiration, or goal"

Turtle, the poet told you who he are :  “I” “ The first person singular “ was a lost soul.

Turtle, the poet told you what that means : He’s in the dumps, “ With not one dream,

aspiration, or goal "

Some of the poets come here for help, not to be confused .

turtle
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3 posted 02-17-2009 05:59 PM       View Profile for turtle   Email turtle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for turtle



chops, you and I are saying the same thing???
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4 posted 02-17-2009 06:06 PM       View Profile for chopsticks   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for chopsticks

OK, if you say so.
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5 posted 02-17-2009 07:47 PM       View Profile for turtle   Email turtle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for turtle



Thanks for explaining it for me chops.
I was turning my eggs. IT, what he said

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6 posted 02-18-2009 05:50 AM       View Profile for chopsticks   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for chopsticks

Turtle, you are welcome. I don’t know what happen , but IT got it coming and going.

We are kind of like part of that four man work gang back in the REAL depression:

~~One a coming, one a going , one a resting, and one a hoeing ~~  

Btw, you may be eating  way too many eggs .

[This message has been edited by chopsticks (02-18-2009 10:29 AM).]

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7 posted 02-18-2009 11:07 AM       View Profile for turtle   Email turtle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for turtle

pssst

I'm not sure we can use that sort of language here....

hoeing?

I don't thing I want to know how you made a living back then


    
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8 posted 02-18-2009 12:44 PM       View Profile for chopsticks   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for chopsticks

Turtle, I only did hoeing for a hobby.

I love your form letters.

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