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Bill Shirnberg
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0 posted 2009-01-24 07:06 PM



Look there smell the acrid haste
On breath of chaos incarnate

After a short commercial break

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Bill Shirnberg
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since 2007-10-28
Posts 50
USA AOK
1 posted 2009-01-25 09:21 PM


I wrote this on down wrong it's supposed to be

There see the smell of acrid haste?
On breath of chaos  incarnate

After a short commercial break

turtle
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since 2009-01-23
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Harbor
2 posted 2009-01-27 04:09 PM


Well Bill,

I think you may have written this (on) down wrong again.

Perhaps you mean:

There(,) see the smell of acrid haste
(o)n breath of chaos incarnate(?)

(We'll be back) after a short commercial break(.)

Turtle

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