Draft of poem called the White Knight

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Draft of poem called the White Knight

ShortBanshee
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since 2009-01-11

Posts 2
UK

0 posted 2009-01-11 06:40 PM

This poem is called the "White Knight", It isn't a serious poem and is aimed at young children. I would be grateful of any help.

There is a white knight,
He doesnt know which end of the lance is which.
Every time he tries to mount,
The horse runs away with fright.
His armours missing most the plates,
Hes wearing odd socks again.

He decides the horse is too much hassle.
Says,
Ill walk the way.
But he doesnt know left from right,
And could it be fate,
That he ends up flat on his face.

The mule watches amazed,
As the knight argues with a tree,
Then hurts his knee.
Hes beginning to flag,
So he decides to signal.

Squire!
Your assistance is required,
The enemy is too great,
We need to escape

The squire rushes out,
The hunting hut.
Sword in one hand,
Mutton bone in the other.
Sire I say,
Its night,
Come inside,
We have ham,
And light.

Its all in the hair,
You see.
The minds all there,
Just its starting to reach the feet.
Even dye,
Cant hide these streaks.

chopsticks
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since 2007-10-02

Posts 888
The US,

1 posted 2009-01-13 10:22 AM

Hi Banshee, nature abhors a vacuum . I feel the same about zeros ,so I am offering a new word for things that are here, there, , everywhere/nowhere. The word is ~ Vaco ~ rhymes with wacko , but that’s me not you .

Btw, welcome to the forum .

oceanvu2
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since 2007-02-24

Posts 1066
Santa Monica, California, USA

2 posted 2009-01-13 11:31 PM

Hi!  Re:  This poem is called the "White Knight", It isn't a serious poem and is aimed at young children."

I have to think this is a tongue in cheek remark.  There probably isn't a child under thirty who could make hide nor hair of it.  It defies all conventions of "story" poems (not necessarily bad) introduces characters and incident at random, and make no linear sense.

Pretty much, it reminds me of the fables which Henry Miller wrote in the 30's.  That's not bad either.

It's OK and fun to pull someone's leg with a silly intro, but it's also OK to offer something up for what it is.

If you are serious about this being a poem for children, I suggest you talk to some children.

Best, Jimbeaux

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