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The Netting Distance From Here to Mexico.
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The Netting Distance From Here to Mexico. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. 
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I'm a child chasing a butterfly, with naked and empty hands. My little monarch has just flown above and into what would be a mighty fine netting distance. I'll be quite alright, fingering the cities beneath and between the blades of kentucky blue grass. I'll watch you flutter on your merry way and enjoy the midday sun. _________________________________________ So this is what it's like to laughsmilecrydie. (series) Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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chopsticks Senior Member
since 2007-10-02
Posts 888The US, |
HI Metal, I like your poem it has butterflies, blue grass, and Mexico . I am reminded that on the butterfly’s trip to Mexico it made a rest stop at a flourishing border town in South Texas and was approached by a Bee and ask for a date. She said, no can do I’m the daughter of a monarch and you’re just a son of a Bee. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Heh, good joke! Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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beautyincalvary Member
since 2006-07-13
Posts 98 |
This is such a sweet and simple poem. I miss those days.  |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
Hey There Paul! You've come SO far as a writer in the past year that it just flat tickles me! A year ago you couldn't have written a title like "The Netting Distance From Here To Mexico" let alone the poem that follows. This is a very good job, and I don't have a single "chich." Best, Jimbeaux |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Beauty... Thanks much. The days are good. Jimbeaux... I've come a long ways, I s'pose. None, huh? Not even a single one? Not even ONE? Ha! Thank you sir, your opinion means a lot more to me, than you could probably imagine. -P Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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