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The Netting Distance From Here to Mexico.

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viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.


0 posted 01-05-2009 01:55 AM       View Profile for viking_metal   Email viking_metal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for viking_metal

I'm a child chasing a butterfly,
with naked and empty hands.
My little monarch
has just flown above and into
what would be a mighty fine netting distance.

I'll be quite alright,
fingering the cities beneath and between
the blades of kentucky blue grass.
I'll watch you flutter on your merry way

and enjoy the midday sun.
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So this is what it's like to laughsmilecrydie. (series)

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

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chopsticks
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The US,


1 posted 01-05-2009 08:51 AM       View Profile for chopsticks   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for chopsticks

HI Metal, I like your poem it has butterflies, blue grass, and Mexico  .

I am reminded that on the butterfly’s trip to Mexico it made a rest stop at a flourishing  border town in South Texas and was approached by a Bee and ask for a date.  She said, no can do I’m the daughter of a monarch and you’re  just a son of a Bee.

viking_metal
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2 posted 01-06-2009 02:45 PM       View Profile for viking_metal   Email viking_metal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for viking_metal

Heh, good joke!




Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.
beautyincalvary
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3 posted 01-11-2009 01:27 PM       View Profile for beautyincalvary   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for beautyincalvary

This is such a sweet and simple poem. I miss those days.
oceanvu2
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4 posted 01-14-2009 12:24 AM       View Profile for oceanvu2   Email oceanvu2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for oceanvu2

Hey There Paul!  You've come SO far as a writer in the past year that it just flat tickles me!  A year ago you couldn't have written a title like "The Netting Distance From Here To Mexico" let alone the poem that follows.

This is a very good job, and I don't have a single "chich."

Best, Jimbeaux
viking_metal
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5 posted 01-14-2009 10:51 AM       View Profile for viking_metal   Email viking_metal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for viking_metal

Beauty... Thanks much. The days are good.

Jimbeaux... I've come a long ways, I s'pose. None, huh? Not even a single one? Not even ONE? Ha! Thank you sir, your opinion means a lot more to me, than you could probably imagine.

-P

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