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Catching the Rhythm

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shades_of_green
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0 posted 12-17-2008 11:02 PM       View Profile for shades_of_green   Email shades_of_green   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for shades_of_green

Catching the rhythm,
Feeling the beat
With the Salsa it's easy
To catch the downbeat

Whirling around,
I feel lightheaded
But I don't need to think
The motions are embedded

I know the other dancers,
When we twirl around
Even though we haven't met,
We connect through the sound

Through the heat of the dance,
My memories shone
Remembering they had partners,
And that I was alone

This thought snapped me back,
And I stepped off the dance floor
Regretfully leaving,
But I could always return for more
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1 posted 12-18-2008 11:11 AM       View Profile for chopsticks   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for chopsticks

I Like this one. The delightful little hook is in the fourth stanza and I would consider loosing the last stanza.
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Thanks for you imput!
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wow, what's the story beneath those lines? I kinda perceive it differently other than a dance floor scenario. good one for me.

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